Tohru in s-so adorable and awesome and yeah uh Tohru eeeeee
Youji out actually, I'm still making my decision on this one. It seems a little hard to follow, like is he hitting on a zombie? But you do have the voice - but it's a little flat? I do like the pushy woman line though. . .
Kagura in I liked all the jokes, and it kept me interested through the whole app, easy to read and cute voice.
Flonne in A-awesome omg Flonne
Maya out Although I'm really happy to see some Phoenix Wright, I had to vote you out. I probably have really high standards because Maya's awesome, but this really wasn't enough of Maya for me. It showed her hyper side, but she also has a certain brand of flat sarcasm, and another thing this app is missing is. . . non-sequitur humor? Not quit entirely non-sequitur but Maya's a little more random, plus a lot of the humor in the app is based around jokes in-canon which is the main thing. It's fine to mention, but Maya would be interested in way more than a waterfall and Pink Princess at zombie camp, she'd want to
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Aheh, I was worried about that. I'm afraid that due to my awesum procrastination skeelz, I didn't get to everything I should've. BUT UM sorry for the mistakes and thanks for the v. helpful crit!
Re: Maya AppertheboxizationOctober 7 2006, 16:15:01 UTC
Ahaha man I know how that feels, I didn't even get to any application this round thanks to that. I highly suggest playing through the game and picking all sorts of awful wrong options during court if you haven't already, Maya says some really hilarious stuff.
Youji appertheboxizationOctober 7 2006, 16:17:51 UTC
He was attacking the zombie, yes. I was a little nervous about placing that part in there, but I was trying to show both sides of his character and not just his flirty side. Although I can see what you mean now.
Re: Wiccan #1alexanderOctober 7 2006, 17:09:10 UTC
Uh, lesseeeee. I'm really bad at this sort of thing (hee and have a cold |D ) but... Your app feels more like an amoeba, connected by kind of more spread out. And #2's feels a little more directed and cohesive.
But yeah, your app was good, but since there's two apps :x I know I'm not being helpful AT ALL D:
All in except for Maya, Wiccan #1 (it was solid and had a good voice and if it weren't up against Wiccan #2's app I probably would have given it an in, but such is life), and Kagura (who was an abstain as usual). Flonne, I love you ever so much.
Re: Maya AppergetrhythmicOctober 7 2006, 16:47:38 UTC
Awesome, I get to display my terrible concrit skill.
And unfortunately, this time it is indeed really terrible (um, my crit, not your app). Something is just, I don't know, off here. It feels a little disjointed, which is weird because I see the transitions and all, but it still kind of feels like a few assorted jokes that didn't really hit for me (I liked the "Crazed Cravat" thing but it doesn't sell me on Maya herself). There's a voice there so please do reapp, but it just didn't work for me this time.
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Youji out actually, I'm still making my decision on this one. It seems a little hard to follow, like is he hitting on a zombie? But you do have the voice - but it's a little flat? I do like the pushy woman line though. . .
Kagura in I liked all the jokes, and it kept me interested through the whole app, easy to read and cute voice.
Flonne in A-awesome omg Flonne
Maya out Although I'm really happy to see some Phoenix Wright, I had to vote you out. I probably have really high standards because Maya's awesome, but this really wasn't enough of Maya for me. It showed her hyper side, but she also has a certain brand of flat sarcasm, and another thing this app is missing is. . . non-sequitur humor? Not quit entirely non-sequitur but Maya's a little more random, plus a lot of the humor in the app is based around jokes in-canon which is the main thing. It's fine to mention, but Maya would be interested in way more than a waterfall and Pink Princess at zombie camp, she'd want to ( ... )
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Thank you for the crit!
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ANYWAY. All in except Maya. And, uh Wiccan 1, I guess. Yeah.
Wiccan 1, you weren't bad, but ... mwee, Wiccan 2. Yes.
I HAVE COHERENCY IN MY BACK POCKET... ;; I'm just sitting down and cannot access it.
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But yeah, your app was good, but since there's two apps :x I know I'm not being helpful AT ALL D:
*fail*
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TOHRU, WHERE WERE YOU A FEW MONTHS AGO :(((((
Although the first Wiccan, had you been on your own, would be an instant in from me.
ps. Second Wiccan? You and Willow need to meet yesterday.
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And unfortunately, this time it is indeed really terrible (um, my crit, not your app). Something is just, I don't know, off here. It feels a little disjointed, which is weird because I see the transitions and all, but it still kind of feels like a few assorted jokes that didn't really hit for me (I liked the "Crazed Cravat" thing but it doesn't sell me on Maya herself). There's a voice there so please do reapp, but it just didn't work for me this time.
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