Tohru in s-so adorable and awesome and yeah uh Tohru eeeeee
Youji out actually, I'm still making my decision on this one. It seems a little hard to follow, like is he hitting on a zombie? But you do have the voice - but it's a little flat? I do like the pushy woman line though. . .
Kagura in I liked all the jokes, and it kept me interested through the whole app, easy to read and cute voice.
Flonne in A-awesome omg Flonne
Maya out Although I'm really happy to see some Phoenix Wright, I had to vote you out. I probably have really high standards because Maya's awesome, but this really wasn't enough of Maya for me. It showed her hyper side, but she also has a certain brand of flat sarcasm, and another thing this app is missing is. . . non-sequitur humor? Not quit entirely non-sequitur but Maya's a little more random, plus a lot of the humor in the app is based around jokes in-canon which is the main thing. It's fine to mention, but Maya would be interested in way more than a waterfall and Pink Princess at zombie camp, she'd want to see everything and she'd respond to everything. I can't see her just writing away the zombies as shambling masses and atmosphere.
Nagi in I think this app is really sharp, very fresh computer jokes while still sounding like a quiet, possibly sadistic boy.
Wiccan 2 in Both were cute, but 2 just nailed it, it's adorable and funny and his personality is really shining through. The meta is hilarious and well-balanced with the 'reality' parts of the app, and the line about being a not-melting witch and the dry delivery of the message to Speed and - yeah this was an awesome app. A++
Aheh, I was worried about that. I'm afraid that due to my awesum procrastination skeelz, I didn't get to everything I should've. BUT UM sorry for the mistakes and thanks for the v. helpful crit!
Re: Maya AppertheboxizationOctober 7 2006, 16:15:01 UTC
Ahaha man I know how that feels, I didn't even get to any application this round thanks to that. I highly suggest playing through the game and picking all sorts of awful wrong options during court if you haven't already, Maya says some really hilarious stuff.
Youji appertheboxizationOctober 7 2006, 16:17:51 UTC
He was attacking the zombie, yes. I was a little nervous about placing that part in there, but I was trying to show both sides of his character and not just his flirty side. Although I can see what you mean now.
Crit? Even though I am not re-apping for obvious reasons. XD I would like to know what I could have done better anyway. It might help with my next app.
Youji out actually, I'm still making my decision on this one. It seems a little hard to follow, like is he hitting on a zombie? But you do have the voice - but it's a little flat? I do like the pushy woman line though. . .
Kagura in I liked all the jokes, and it kept me interested through the whole app, easy to read and cute voice.
Flonne in A-awesome omg Flonne
Maya out Although I'm really happy to see some Phoenix Wright, I had to vote you out. I probably have really high standards because Maya's awesome, but this really wasn't enough of Maya for me. It showed her hyper side, but she also has a certain brand of flat sarcasm, and another thing this app is missing is. . . non-sequitur humor? Not quit entirely non-sequitur but Maya's a little more random, plus a lot of the humor in the app is based around jokes in-canon which is the main thing. It's fine to mention, but Maya would be interested in way more than a waterfall and Pink Princess at zombie camp, she'd want to see everything and she'd respond to everything. I can't see her just writing away the zombies as shambling masses and atmosphere.
Nagi in I think this app is really sharp, very fresh computer jokes while still sounding like a quiet, possibly sadistic boy.
Wiccan 2 in Both were cute, but 2 just nailed it, it's adorable and funny and his personality is really shining through. The meta is hilarious and well-balanced with the 'reality' parts of the app, and the line about being a not-melting witch and the dry delivery of the message to Speed and - yeah this was an awesome app. A++
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