love poetry contest entry! feedback, please. :)
okay. this one I made up just now. at... 12:35 am. jeez, I feel bad not capitalizing. it feels weird. but.no energy. no time for grammar things. (oh, sure, these sentences make my poetry sound promising... xD). Here are my entries for the "love poetry" contest for Teen Ink! Feedback/comments appreciated! :)
"Idiocy."
Why do I feel this way?
My heart wants to let it out,
There’s so much to say,
But my throat seems to suffer a serious drought.
I wish there was an easy way to say this,
A way to determine how I feel,
My common sense is thrown into the abyss,
I’m engulfed in a feeling so surreal.
Perhaps this is what all those songs are about,
What all those melodies try to explain:
To throw this strange reality out,
Let fear and caution go down the drain.
I see them hold hands,
Does she dare let go?
Who knows what lies in love’s plans:
Could it all be a show?
These questions spring,
It’s all I can think about.
I wonder what this love will bring,
Truth being: there’s only one way to find out.
They’ll tell you love is senseless,
That love is cruel,
That the minute you give in your heart is defenseless,
You will be considered an absolute fool.
Regardless, I take his hand,
Who cares if others can’t comprehend?
Because together we’ll always stand:
Idiots in love, till the very end.
__________________________________
These ones are already posted on my blog, it was in previous entries, but I've decided to submit them, too. :)
"If."
If only this minute was longer,
If only you could’ve known,
If only it was more obvious,
If only my true feelings were shown.
But here, you’re simply asking,
“Can I hold your hand?”
It’s evident I’ll always reply:
“Only if you never let go.”
"Shattered, but not broken."
How does it make me feel?
It makes me feel like
The newspaper
Stepped on
Over and over…
Wet from the rain,
From my tears,
Tattered,
Lost,
Scattered.
It makes me feel like I’m nothing,
Like this is all a game,
walking with someone else,
You should know it’s not the same,
If you could only hear,
See what’s left of me,
These broken pieces
You walked away from,
Leaving me behind.
I’ve said “it’s okay”,
over and over,
Again and again,
But what you never really heard,
Is what I really meant,
What you should’ve known.
It’s okay,
I can pick myself up,
I’ve done it before,
It’s not like a broken heart
Can never be fixed:
It just can never be whole again.
I stood there,
Blinking in disbelief,
Is this really what you want?
Me
Left behind,
whispering,
Hopelessly,
But with all the hope left,
All I kept in my heart
Since the first time you said
You would always be there.
The lies built up inside me and burst,
I finally screamed:
Please don’t leave.
"92 Days."
If only time could tell the past
Just to remember all that
Has gone by so fast,
I’ve been searching for where my heart’s been at.
Now you’ve said it all,
This summer would be different from the last,
Which is why we’re here strong and tall,
Our hands entwined as we lay on the grass.
We squint at the vast blue sky,
How like the future, was so vast and unknown,
Thoughts of it made a tear fall from my eye,
You wiped it away and, I remembered I was not alone.
Summer will come,
Summer will go,
Summer for some,
Is merely a show.
People pass, thinking this is just another fling,
At the end of August, they expect us to part,
They don’t realize this is the real thing,
That no distance can keep our feelings apart.
_______________
Okay, that's it for now. I might add some more later, but this is it for right now.
Let me know what you honestly think about these! :) Thanks!
"Idiocy."
Why do I feel this way?
My heart wants to let it out,
There’s so much to say,
But my throat seems to suffer a serious drought.
I wish there was an easy way to say this,
A way to determine how I feel,
My common sense is thrown into the abyss,
I’m engulfed in a feeling so surreal.
Perhaps this is what all those songs are about,
What all those melodies try to explain:
To throw this strange reality out,
Let fear and caution go down the drain.
I see them hold hands,
Does she dare let go?
Who knows what lies in love’s plans:
Could it all be a show?
These questions spring,
It’s all I can think about.
I wonder what this love will bring,
Truth being: there’s only one way to find out.
They’ll tell you love is senseless,
That love is cruel,
That the minute you give in your heart is defenseless,
You will be considered an absolute fool.
Regardless, I take his hand,
Who cares if others can’t comprehend?
Because together we’ll always stand:
Idiots in love, till the very end.
__________________________________
These ones are already posted on my blog, it was in previous entries, but I've decided to submit them, too. :)
"If."
If only this minute was longer,
If only you could’ve known,
If only it was more obvious,
If only my true feelings were shown.
But here, you’re simply asking,
“Can I hold your hand?”
It’s evident I’ll always reply:
“Only if you never let go.”
"Shattered, but not broken."
How does it make me feel?
It makes me feel like
The newspaper
Stepped on
Over and over…
Wet from the rain,
From my tears,
Tattered,
Lost,
Scattered.
It makes me feel like I’m nothing,
Like this is all a game,
walking with someone else,
You should know it’s not the same,
If you could only hear,
See what’s left of me,
These broken pieces
You walked away from,
Leaving me behind.
I’ve said “it’s okay”,
over and over,
Again and again,
But what you never really heard,
Is what I really meant,
What you should’ve known.
It’s okay,
I can pick myself up,
I’ve done it before,
It’s not like a broken heart
Can never be fixed:
It just can never be whole again.
I stood there,
Blinking in disbelief,
Is this really what you want?
Me
Left behind,
whispering,
Hopelessly,
But with all the hope left,
All I kept in my heart
Since the first time you said
You would always be there.
The lies built up inside me and burst,
I finally screamed:
Please don’t leave.
"92 Days."
If only time could tell the past
Just to remember all that
Has gone by so fast,
I’ve been searching for where my heart’s been at.
Now you’ve said it all,
This summer would be different from the last,
Which is why we’re here strong and tall,
Our hands entwined as we lay on the grass.
We squint at the vast blue sky,
How like the future, was so vast and unknown,
Thoughts of it made a tear fall from my eye,
You wiped it away and, I remembered I was not alone.
Summer will come,
Summer will go,
Summer for some,
Is merely a show.
People pass, thinking this is just another fling,
At the end of August, they expect us to part,
They don’t realize this is the real thing,
That no distance can keep our feelings apart.
_______________
Okay, that's it for now. I might add some more later, but this is it for right now.
Let me know what you honestly think about these! :) Thanks!