First sporking... I bring a new fandom...
I went to look for good B&S fanfic at the Pit (where I usually go to gawk at cringe-inducing House stories which I then MST without mercy), but should've known that was not going to be the case... Sporking in bold because it's a habit of mine.
Brothers, Sisters and Losties, a Brothers & Sisters fanfic
Summary: this fanfic involves two of my ( Read more... )
Brothers, Sisters and Losties, a Brothers & Sisters fanfic
Summary: this fanfic involves two of my ( Read more... )
I agree with you on the annoyance of misspellings of names.
I'm sure where the name WihtWhite even came from. . .
“he had and emergency at work” sarah said picking up Whit “he’ll be here soon”
I could see her saying this in annoyance. Like, he always seems to have emergencies at work. Also, it seems like there should be some sort of explanation as to the emergency/his job.
extra- extended table
I don't even know what this is. . .do they mean she put in yet another leaf? And really. . .could the room even hold another leaf put in the table? (It seems more plausible that if there were that many kids, there would be a kiddy table somewhere).
“yeah well.. I do what I can”
I can't see Sarah being this. . .egotistical. I could see Kevin saying it, especially as a joke.
well except for Alex who kept bouncing up and down her
mother’s lap
Maybe it's just me, but I hate the word "well" in this context in the narration. It just makes it sound like a kid wrote it. Also, where's the prepostion? Sounds like Alex is making her mother's lap bounce up and down.
These Walkers are kinda jumpy, don't you think?
Your comment made me laugh (I know what you're referring to, and I agree, but funny nonetheless).
“yei! P is gonna make an anoucement !” With said impatiencetly
Umm. . .I don't think I even know what this is supposed to say. I'm serverely hoping the author is either not a native English speaker, or had major typing issues (i.e. typed too fast and forgot to proofread).
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