Together

[amaggiepie]

This is in response to willow2883 's prompt on my drabble meme.  Of course, since I fail at drabbles, everyone is getting one-shots.  They fought me tooth and nail on this, bb, so sorry for the delay.  It's also my first ever lemon.  I hope you like it.

Prompt:  Twilight | Jacob/Bella | Jacob has just slid into the sleeping bag with Bella and Edward is

Comments

[willow2883]

Okay, I'm only about one paragraph in and I'm giggling like a school girl already! I love, love, love the insight into Jacob's thoughts. Okay. *scrolls back up*
My cock is touching Bella’s crotch
I gasped out loud at that.
Well, she’s not cold down there at least
Bahahaha!
Gah! Great move making her too hot & removing the clothing. :)
“Please what?” She had to ask me. If she asked, I would do anything for her.
I LOVE when Jacob makes her ask for it!!
marking her as mine in the most primal way.
Love this line! Love the word 'primal'. Gah!
OMG! OMG! OMG! I loved this!!! YOu have to continue this! What happens when Edward comes back and finds out? Is Bella pregnant? What will they do? *stomps foot* Don't be a tease! You have to continue this!!
P.S. Thank you btw! I won't even harrass you about the belatedness. Haha. Mwah!

[amaggiepie]

I'm so glad you like it, bb!!!

Love this line! Love the word 'primal'. Gah!

I actually deleted and retyped that word about 3 times. I like it too, but IDK. When I write lemons I overthink every single word and I'm terrified things sound rediculous.

OMG! OMG! OMG! I loved this!!! YOu have to continue this! What happens when Edward comes back and finds out? Is Bella pregnant? What will they do? *stomps foot* Don't be a tease! You have to continue this!!
P.S. Thank you btw! I won't even harrass you about the belatedness. Haha. Mwah!

I'm glad you loved it. I don't know if I can continue it. Maybe one more part? I really don't know what happens next, LOL. I was with Jacob on not wanting to think about what would happen when Edward got back. Maybe Victoria would just kill him, problem solved. Ohhh. Now THERE's a PLOT BUNNY. Hahaha!

P.S. I am a TOTAL tease. ;)

[willow2883]

One more one-shot would do it. You don't have to go on for 20 chapters about it.
*whispers* Do it.
And see, all you needed to do was talk it out to figure out where to go with it. Although a confrontation between Eddie and Jake, with Bella standing behind Jacob for once, would be HOT!
Don't get yourself intimidated. I used to be scared to write Edward, but once I jumped in and did it, it was fun! Sometimes the stuff we try to talk ourselves out of cos we don't think we have it in us, is the stuff that comes out the best.
P.S. Yes you are. Welcome to the club. LOL

[amaggiepie]

Linking you this comment. Because I'm a meanie. Also, I'm serously thinking about part ii. I've never killed Eddie dearest before, but if I do it, things will probs be all angst angst angst so yeah...

[amaggiepie]

Thank you! I definately would have been begging for it ;)

I never would have guessed it was your first lemon had you not said it - great job. They're so nerve wracking to write!

Yay! Thanks so much! I agree, I spent so much time on this and probably thought about it way too much, haha!

[konekochu]

Awesome, I agree with the others with 'My cock is touching Bella’s crotch.' Being hilarious. Really great Lemon, and I look forward to reading more by you. :D *flails with glee*

[amaggiepie]

Thank you!

*also flails with glee*

I'm always hoping to stop with the procratinating and write more often, but it never seems to happen. Maybe someday.

[amaggiepie]

Thank you! So glad you like it.

I always feel like if *I* knew that a mind reading vampire was reading my mind, I would think really annoying things. Or really personal things to embarrass him. Or just loads of random crap. Or I could mentally sing, "I know a song that gets on everyboyd's nerves, everybody's nerves, everybody's nerves. I know a song that gets on everybody's nerves and this is how it goes... dun dun dun..." (rinse and repeat) Yeah. But that's just me...

You do realise you're now obligated to write part 2? Good, glad we've cleared that up ;)

Maybe? See my response to willow2883's comment above. :D

BTW - rotten potatoes really do stink atrociously. Worse than any other rotting vegetable. I know this because I had an experience with a whole sack of them in an old fridge...it wasn't pleasant. Pretty much exactly like Eddiesparklypoopants.I have also unfortunately had an experience with an entire sack of rotten potatoes. In my pantry. *dies* I may have vomited. May

[amaggiepie]

Linking you this comment, because I know you appreciate knowing about thought-out writing. Tee hee.

[lsjcandy]

I WAS WAITING FOR THIS. Almost thought you'd forgotten. In all honesty, I still have some undone prompts, too.
As I tell any author, I love an insight in Jacob's mind. The swearing, mainly, is what makes it real. There's not one day I don't cuss mentally. Then there is the sarcasm and wittiness, and overall hate for Edward, and the love for Bella, of course.
This, by the way, is sexiness from the start.

My cock is touching Bella’s crotch.
Lololol. Poor Eddiekins having to listen to such vulgair thoughts xd

Your first time lemon was incredible, like, yum. Not too long, or too descriptive. Although I do think you could've made it a bit more... well, as if either one of them was actually worried. (Contraception, for example.)

[amaggiepie]

Thanks! Glad you liked it! I had fun with the Jacob snark, I have to say. It's so much easier for me to get into his head than Bella's...

Although I do think you could've made it a bit more... well, as if either one of them was actually worried. (Contraception, for example.)There is a reason (as there is with everything that I write, really) that I did it this way. This was kind of like what my first time was like. Despite the fact that I knew all about birth control, and so did he, we were fooling around one day and it just happened. And I was SO. SCARED I would be pregnant. When I realized it afterwards, it was like a slap in the face with reality. I ended up having to tell my mom and she got me birth control right then. It was quite a mortifying conversation, with my boyfriend present, in which she asked him if he orgasmed. I nearly died

[lsjcandy]

Ikr? Jacob's just more like the average person, when it comes to thinking. ('Cause, you know, his common sense tends to be present.)

Ah, well, in that sense, I understand it. And well, it's not like they carry condoms with them 24/7. Jacob isn't that hopeful and Bella's boyfriend's a bit too old-fashioned for Bella to be that hopeful.

In the literal heat of the moment (see what I did there?), no, even Bella would've done that in canon.

Of course, she still has to pay for what she did in Reality and Dreams.

[willow2883]

Um, yeah, I was even dumber than you. I went for about a year w/o birth control. Thank the lord I never got pregnant.
And yeah, you are mean. :P
And hey! I'm trying to live down RaD with Intoxicating!
*mutters* Some people can just never forgive and forget.