"Sold Out" H/Ch, 1/1, NC-17

Aug 14, 2007 04:54


Title:  "Sold Out"
Pairing:  House/Chase
Rating:  NC-17 or hard R
Prompt 78 for

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one shots, smut

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aithlyn August 14 2007, 13:46:20 UTC
Mmmmm Mmmmm good! There's just not enough smut of this pairing. Thank you for stepping up to the plate!

(BTW if you'd like a beta, I'd be willing. I caught a few minor errors in this piece.)

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alex51324 August 14 2007, 19:41:00 UTC
OK, point 'em out.

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imfreakinorange August 14 2007, 17:59:01 UTC
nice...

I like the end... at least Chase was happy about the whole thing :)

Your description rules as per usual! i don't know how you do it!

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alex51324 August 14 2007, 19:39:35 UTC
Thanks...the ending was supposed to suggest that it had all been a game, from the beginning. I found that I couldn't write it as actual dub-con.

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imfreakinorange August 14 2007, 20:57:41 UTC
That's good... :)

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imfreakinorange August 15 2007, 00:54:44 UTC
One question! how did House get Chase's pants off of his legs without taking off his shoes?

i've tried many a time to get my pants off without taking off my shoes... dont ask... and i have had little success LOL

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theyreforrachel August 14 2007, 18:05:33 UTC
This my favourite type of House >:D

Good, but I caught several mistakes. A beta would help you (I know aithlyn offered, but I'm willing as well :D)

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alex51324 August 14 2007, 19:41:28 UTC
OK, point 'em out!

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theyreforrachel August 14 2007, 20:04:50 UTC
Here we go:

“Pick up your foot.” House taps his right calf with his cane.

He obeys, leaning on his hands for balance. House pokes at his trousers with the cane until they’re disentangled from his foot, then has him raise his right foot and repeats the process. House tapped his right calf, signifying that Chase raise his right foot. He should next raise his left to repeat.

Chase quickly realizes he has worse problems, though, as House crams a wad of fabric, which case recognizes as his underpants, into his mouth. should either be Chase or, better yet he.

:D

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alex51324 August 15 2007, 01:53:20 UTC
Fixed! Thanks.

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aragon_san August 15 2007, 00:57:37 UTC
Awesome! Also very hot. There's too much fluffy House/Chase out there imo where House ruminates about "his beautiful angel". >_< And that with Chase's known proclivities!
Also liked that it wasn't dub-con with that prompt: it's either BDSM or non-consensual. I get annoyed if people think they write BDSM just because cuffs or whips happen to be involved in subdueing an unwilling victim.

I have a factual quibble: laying each stroke directly on top of the first ones I'm all for House being supremely talented and have no doubt that, should he decide to take up BDSM (if for some reason he hasn't already ^_^), he'd be great at domming. But - hitting that precisely in the dark stretches even my faith in him a bit! It sounds a bit as if you forgot your setting...

And I haven't seen the others mentioning it: near the end when Chase is wearing a shoes should be a shoe or shoes

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alex51324 August 15 2007, 01:50:42 UTC
You're right, I wasn't thinking about it being dark in the room when I wrote that particular line. Oh well.

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aragon_san August 15 2007, 03:20:23 UTC
You wrote House/Chase!!! I've been dying for more of this pairing and I love the BDSM aspect. Thanks for making it an actual, legit scene instead of random borderline rape.

The only quibble I have is that I wasn't convinced Chase was enjoying it. Not much in the prose indicated that he liked being spanked with House's belt (HOT) or being "forced" to blow him.

Thank you for writing this and the Pencils update.

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aragon_san August 15 2007, 12:57:42 UTC
I've actually interpreted this as him being into the scene, thus supposedly not knowing what'll happen and coerced to safe his job being unsure and apprehensive. It's a roleplay and it won't work if Chase acts as if he'd loved it and has nothing to fear, possibly even asked for the scenario....
Like one of those classic interrogation phantasies played out: where the submissive part tries to/wants to act as if he's truly locked up somewhere with the possibility of never seing the light of day again and being defiant/lying would really lead to prison sentences or worse while the playpartner does her level best to play a sadistic, man-hating, lesbian KGB-agent (thanks Bond-movies) hell-bent on breaking the "suspect". Especially difficult to stay in character if the suspect demands that the icy blonde interrogator please speak with a fake russian accent all the time and you'll have to try hard not to ruin the scene by bursting out laughing ^_^

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crueltyxfree August 15 2007, 04:56:44 UTC
Wow, that was hot. I love the way you portrayed House/Chase; I've never been a fan but Christ, that was good.

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