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Prompt 30: Never Look Back -- Because Once, We Were Close -- Part 2

Nov 21, 2006 17:35

He smiles, then frowns, realizing that his joke was not in the best of taste. I return his smile, though, not offended in the least. “It’s for Kikre,” I tell him.

He shakes his head. “Don’t worry about Kikre. She’s not worth your time.”

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black_saturniid December 11 2006, 22:06:02 UTC

It got a little confusing for me at times, but that's probably because it's 7:00 pm and I've had no coffee. [There is no place called Assera. Therefore, it is an invented place. Nice.] You might want to work on... I dunno, it's not really FLOW but... um. The way you talk about the revolution and things. Some people might get confused.

Like the poor ones who have no coffee and want to sleeeeeep.

Otherwise, I LOVE your description and your dialogue. The relationship between Etin and Karrah is absolutely TANGIBLE -- perfect -- and I think Atenin was extremely well portrayed as well.

:) Well done!
-Shona

principessar December 11 2006, 22:24:07 UTC

Yeah, sorry, LOL. It can be confusing but I don't want to clutter up narrative with the basics 0.0 I can explain if you want 0.0 but yeah I can see how it can be confusing. This stuff floats around in my head for so long that I don't remember that maybe I made it up and should explain? LOL ( ... )

black_saturniid December 11 2006, 22:30:09 UTC

Alternate historical fiction works. ^^

All right. I've got it now. [I also have the coffee. With whipped cream. Buaha.] I know Russia. Yeah. History's one of my obsessions, but I could have made the same connection with the French Revolution. [with the story, I mean. Without your info. Ugh. You get me, I'm sure.]

I'm in Puerto Rico. ^^ And my clock was wrong. It's 6:30 pm. :S My brain is on crack and my inner clock decided to hit up the meth guy on the corner. *shakes head*

-Shona

principessar December 11 2006, 22:37:20 UTC

Hehe, cool. I never do know what to call these things. Some people are apt to say fantasy but I hold that it's not fantasy if it doesn't involve magic or magical creatures and all of my stuff could happen in the real world, I think anyhow... :P

Yay for coffee! And getting it :P I love history, 20th century in particular but really all history. Considering Assera Russia does solve some of the anachronism problems, because in Russia you can have feudalism (even though serfdom ended before the revolution by a while...) and 20th-century style revolution going on at the same time. My date in my head for this is 1630 or '40 something, but I'm like ... yeah, uh, no. Notice I didn't put the date on the story :P

Ahhh, Puerto Rico :) Are you on the same time zone as like, New York, or Halifax? (Do you know?) 6 to eleven -- let's see -- I think you're on the same time zone as Halifax but I don't know :P

black_saturniid December 11 2006, 23:05:22 UTC

We're an hour behind Halifax, actually. It makes flying to DC a pain in the ass. And no, it ain't fantasy. This doesn't qualify. For me, too, anyways.

[Coffee rules the world!]

I just finished studying Russia in my World History class. I have to take a test on it on Thursday. -_- ew. If that was Russia that would be before the Mongol invasion with Kiev as a major power. :) [note: yes. I study wherever I can get my kicks out of it. lol.]

-Shona

principessar December 11 2006, 23:41:57 UTC

Ahh ... and do you go to DC often? I'm from California but I go to New York pretty often -- and now I'm living in France -- then this summer I went to Russia so I'm used to long trips ( ... )

black_saturniid December 11 2006, 23:46:49 UTC

Sorry. Switch DC for Illinois. :S They're TWO hours behind. blah. [Of course, I can't talk. o.O you're in FRANCE. That's so far away for me!]

Ah Jane Austen.

I don't like her. Kay.

High school. I graduate next year. Dunno what I want to study either. Or where. ^^ I'm so totally prepared for life.

Your friend is addicted. We can stark a "Coffee Addicted" club. :p

-Shona

principessar December 11 2006, 23:53:12 UTC

Ahhh... well, wherever you go, then. I thought I was good at time zones, keeping in touch with my family and all, but then I'm like, talking with friends in Japan (I randomly have many there...) and I keep asking them what time it is there even though they've told me the difference a million times ( ... )

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