He smiles, then frowns, realizing that his joke was not in the best of taste. I return his smile, though, not offended in the least. “It’s for Kikre,” I tell him.
He shakes his head. “Don’t worry about Kikre. She’s not worth your time.”
It’s incredible how he thinks his joke might be offensive but doesn’t stop to
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And finally, I think it's neat how although the main theme involves the two sisters, there is only one small scene between them in the present. I like how you use other 'indirect' characters to show their relationship and to convey Karrah's feelings. =)
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I'm glad you like it! :)
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It was wonderfully written, thank you for sharing! =]
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Like the poor ones who have no coffee and want to sleeeeeep.
Otherwise, I LOVE your description and your dialogue. The relationship between Etin and Karrah is absolutely TANGIBLE -- perfect -- and I think Atenin was extremely well portrayed as well.
:) Well done!
-Shona
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All right. I've got it now. [I also have the coffee. With whipped cream. Buaha.] I know Russia. Yeah. History's one of my obsessions, but I could have made the same connection with the French Revolution. [with the story, I mean. Without your info. Ugh. You get me, I'm sure.]
I'm in Puerto Rico. ^^ And my clock was wrong. It's 6:30 pm. :S My brain is on crack and my inner clock decided to hit up the meth guy on the corner. *shakes head*
-Shona
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Yay for coffee! And getting it :P I love history, 20th century in particular but really all history. Considering Assera Russia does solve some of the anachronism problems, because in Russia you can have feudalism (even though serfdom ended before the revolution by a while...) and 20th-century style revolution going on at the same time. My date in my head for this is 1630 or '40 something, but I'm like ... yeah, uh, no. Notice I didn't put the date on the story :P
Ahhh, Puerto Rico :) Are you on the same time zone as like, New York, or Halifax? (Do you know?) 6 to eleven -- let's see -- I think you're on the same time zone as Halifax but I don't know :P
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Well, overall, I had a great time reading your work. My mind often got sidetracked with thoughts of what might have happened in the revolution and all those 'whys' that can't be answered in a single short story. ^^; This story sparks the imagination, for sure. XD Well, on my part, anyhow.
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Thanks for reading and commenting! I do post here often enough in other stories, so maybe you'll like them too. :)
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