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Shine Like Silver (1/1) (R, gen)

Dec 02, 2011 07:08

Title: Shine Like Silver
Author: zuben_eschamali
Rating: R
Word count: 1,122
Summary: Sometimes being a hunter was like holding a hammer and thinking everything was a nail. The problem was, sometimes that was wrong, and now Sam's life was hanging in the balance.

A/N: Written for 50states_spn and also for hc_bingo (the serial killer square). There's some POV experimentation going on as ( Read more... )

challenge, fifty nifty united states, supernatural, fic

Comments 20

monicawoe December 5 2011, 04:03:29 UTC

Awesome! What a great way to tie in Alistair's origin too.

zubeneschamali December 7 2011, 14:14:42 UTC

Thank you! He's probably much older than that, but it made sense to me...

scintilla10 December 5 2011, 06:08:21 UTC

Oh, this is excellent.

zubeneschamali December 7 2011, 14:14:56 UTC

Thank you! ♥

novakev December 7 2011, 00:54:33 UTC

That was a cool play with the POV. And I love the last line!

zubeneschamali December 7 2011, 14:15:07 UTC

Thank you very much!

marziebarz December 29 2011, 20:52:55 UTC

Alastair. ALASTAIR. OH MY GOD. THATS SO CREEPY. And wow, it didn't take him long to rise to master torturer at all. That's a really awesome little tidbit right there.

Man, it took me forever to figure out it wasn't Dean talking =P that was a pretty awesome writing trick! Is it some guardian demon of Sam's, then? I thought it was an angel at first but it turned Alastair's eyes black so now I'm leaning towards demon. Very cool premise though, with the whole outside influences in Sam's life pushing his decisions thing. This is an awesome story.

zubeneschamali January 2 2012, 04:22:46 UTC

Hope it wasn't too confusing! I did want to mislead people at first, but not too badly.

I figure it was one of the demons that Lucifer told Sam was hanging around and watching him as he grew up. I liked the idea of that demon having to save Sam's life at some point because of their bigger plans for him later on. Nice and creepy. :D

marlowe78 January 25 2012, 23:00:24 UTC

I like this, a lot. The POV is cleverly done (though I kinda knew it wasn't Dean, it'd be strange to think of himself in the third person, but I was thinking it might be Bobby) and the way it's just creeeeeeeeeeeeeeepy... awesome

Only nitpicky point ... I think (though I'm not sure) that Alistair mentioned the human wars? I'm rather kinda sure that it's mentioned somewhere that Alistair (the Hell-one) was up on earth during WW2 at least?

I could be mistaken, though, and also, I don't mind thinking of some other evil demon down there with that name ;-)

Cool story

zubeneschamali January 26 2012, 03:24:57 UTC

I was afraid that I'd missed some canon on where Alastair came from. :( Ah well, the rest of it still works. :) Glad you liked the POV!