Eat your cake, too. (part the second)

[zelost_mind]

Comments

[lilisullivan]

this fic is beautiful!
Seventeen!Dean is just like i imagined him.
Poor Dean, he embraced his life as a hunter, but even though he didn't rebel like Sam, there might have been some pretty dark days where he wished he could do something different.

[zelost_mind]

Oooh, thank you.

I'm relieved that i seem to have gotten seventeen!Dean right.

And yes! There must have been a few times growing up when he just thought; 'Screw hunting! I wanna be an astronaut!' lol.

[ex_tachel65]

What can I say? Loved it.

[zelost_mind]

Aw, so sweet. Thank you, for telling me so.

Re: (that is me... just, changed name)

[zelost_mind]

Now that you mention it, there was a split second of hesitation where i was like; Maybe she'll be a succubus, 'cos that'd be just Dean's luck...

But luckily she ended up turning out pretty regular ;}

Thanks again.

[femmenerd]

I really enjoyed this. Your Dean POV was engaging and authentically teenaged. You also did a really good job of drawing the reader into the story experientially.

I liked how the main OFC was never named, because it's clear that she becomes an archetype of sorts, yet at the same time, Dean's doing that in his head to protect himself from the fact that she *was* a specific person that he lost.

One note: I did find the (mostly shift key related) typos distracting, i.e. the intermittent lowercase i's and etcetera. However, I have to say that since this must have been a first draft since they were all such easily fixable typos, I'm really impressed with how polished the narrative voice was otherwise.

[zelost_mind]

Thank you, I'm pleased you enjoyed it.

Ah yes, *is embarrassed* I have some, uh, grammatical bad habits that really do need straightening out.
I should probably find a beta-reader, eh?

My apologies that you had to endure my typos, but as I said, I'm very pleased you liked it otherwise, and took the time to tell me so. Thanks again.

[kerlihc]

I loved this, as heartbreaking as the ending was and how readily Dean has 'move on.' I liked the narration throughout the story, with the sarcasm of voice of teenage youth. It also gives an interesting background story for the "waitress fixation."

I also have a request if I can make this into an audiofic (posted at spn_multimedia. I have some audiofic on there if you want to hear how my reading sounds.

Again, I'll leave off with "I think this is a fantastic story."

[zelost_mind]

Aw, thank you.

And yes, of course you can. Wow, I'm flattered that you'd wannna do that.
Are you gonna do all the voices different? Lol.

Thanks again. I'm happy you thought so.

[kerlihc]

I wish I could make all the voices distinctly different. For the most parts I try...successful? No clue. heh heh(-_-)'

Thank you and yea!

[elzed]

Oh, nice. Very nice, and hot, and funny and sweet; and I loved how it set the template for Dean's future encounters.

[zelost_mind]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed.

Yeah, I mean something musta happened that shaped Dean into his flippant ways regarding the opposite gender, right?

I'd love to see an episode with flashbacks into his high school years.

Also, nice icon, :}