Heart Of The Sea: Chapter 25 - Stubborn

Jan 28, 2011 22:27

ZeldaQueen: Well, Link has blown the coop and we still have more of this tripe to spork. Strap in

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suethor: gethesemane butler, fic: heart of the sea, stubborn, chapter 25

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southerngaelic January 29 2011, 06:52:01 UTC
*freezes mid-gulp of champagne*

Oh, balls :(

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mogseltof January 29 2011, 08:06:05 UTC
Aaaaw man... That has got to be one of the greatest let downs. *pouts*.

Come to think of it though, where are Elizabeth and Will? She hasn't mentioned either of them in a few chapters.

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zelda_queen January 29 2011, 13:24:47 UTC
Will is off...somewhere. He's MIA from the Kraken attack. Elizabeth ought to be on the ship somewhere. She was kind of forgotten.

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emmram January 29 2011, 09:56:22 UTC
Are the chapters really this... tiny? I mean, I'm not complaining, but still. These chapters are nothing more than a few empty words strung together with maybe one or two sentences in between that actually bear relevance to the plot (or lack, thereof)!

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zelda_queen January 29 2011, 13:26:19 UTC
Yeah, the chapters are really short. That's the only reason the story is as long as it is.

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lurkythespork January 29 2011, 18:37:28 UTC
You know, I reflected on some of my "loved one is dead" dreams, and I don't recall ever having one where I watched the deed happen--just was going around mourning and with a vacancy in my heart, knowing that the death had happened. It bothered me so intensely that I couldn't describe any of it to Murky, a strangled "you were gone" and that was it. And then I was insecure for the rest of the day.

I'm not saying that this is how everyone would or should react, but why I find Gethsuemane's account here too shallow.

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zelda_queen January 29 2011, 18:53:09 UTC
I've had dreams like that as well. Ones where my dad or brother or mom has died and sometimes my dream self doesn't even know why, just that they are dead, and nothing makes me happier than to wake up and find out it isn't true.

That up there that Gethesemane wrote, that's just about the most cliched thing ever. There's no love, just her repeating how needed and beloved her stupid Sue is. >:(

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watson8888 January 29 2011, 23:06:54 UTC
You know, I think this is one story that would actually be improved by a little Tommy Wiseau.

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zelda_queen January 30 2011, 04:14:52 UTC
I know, right? It's like some sign of the apocalypse.

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