the real reason his drinking bothered her? Heath would get fat from the beer.I remember the authors thanking someone in the acknowledgments for helping them sound like teenagers; Apparently, they think all teen girls think this way, which is like Meyer thinking Bella represents the "everygirl." No. Just because you think teen girls really are all judgmental airheads (or you were yourself at that age), does not mean we all are/were
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Yeah, no. I can say for certain that there's just as many, if not more teen girls who would dump a guy for being a drunken dick before worrying about him getting fat
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I agree with everything you said in this first post but I have to say that I hated the way Zoey was described. First of all, Native Americans even half ones have reddish-brown to caramel like skin not olive-white like the Cast team said she does. So I was very upset about because I'm half Native-American not that it matters to you. I just wanted to put my two cents in that's all.
Oh, you just had to go and make her CHEROKEE, didn't you? You know, that whole WILD WARRIOR WAY does not fit in well with CHEROKEE. The reason the White Man deemed Cherokee "civilized" is because the didn't do shit like that. We weren't roaming the plains hunting buffalo being "savages".
Jesus. And by the way, darlin', you keep going on about how you've got distinct Cherokee features. Well, my great uncle was on the Cherokee tribal council. My grandmother speaks the language and lived up with where the Cherokee got relocated in Oklahoma. We're pretty sure I've got a serious dose of Cherokee blood in me, and so does my sister.
You can't tell we're Cherokee. Cherokee features aren't all that dominant when it comes to mingling with the white genes.
*bitchslaps*
Sorry. You saw me go on Catholic Rage, now I had to go on Wagon-Burning-Gut-Eater Rage.
OK, now I have it out, I'm too lazy to flip through and find what I'm looking for, but the deal with these vampires (or vampyres *sniggers*) is a similar deal to True Blood where everyone knows they exist but no one really likes them, which doesn't make a lot of sense later on.
I don't understand how the Trackers work. I've tried, but everywhere my thoughts lead turn into dead ends.
Amazingly enough you actually get to see her family again at the start of the second book, but I haven't read very much so I'm not sure if it turns into an actual subplot. I do despise the way she describes her siblings. Sure, sometimes I would freaking love to kill my younger brothers, but her attitude grates on my nerves.
And everytime I see "vampyre" I giggle and look around for Annagramma and Mrs Earwig or the De Magpyr family.
Ah, I see. I still don't get why more effort isn't taken to keep out Trackers, though. O_o You'd think that if vampires were recognized, some sort of deal would be made with them or something, to limit who they Marked.
I see. Yeah, I'm betting a lot of money that her siblings are either ridiculously horrible or not nearly as bad as she says.
I know. XD It makes me think we're reading "Pride and Prejudice and Zombies" or something.
That has got to be the quickest inciting incident EVER. Why couldn't the authors drag out the being Marked thing? This would be a perfect time to actually ADD stalking. It would have added some tension, and get the character to either A) talk about the vampires Marking people and what the humans are doing about it, if it's known or B) have the character muse that this guy is behind a string of disappearances and 'mysterious deaths' only to find out it's this secret group of vampires (wait sorry, vampyres). Both those ideas took me five minutes to figure out and even I could drag those out for at least two or three chapters. It would added some much needed tension and not make the reader go 'So... she's Marked ... uh... so?'. I don't particuarly care that she's Marked because I cannot grasp the significance of being Marked.
Oh and Vampyre is a legit spelling. I've seen it in folklore during my research for mythical monsters.
I need to hurry up and finish It, reading such an awesome (yet fucking
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It's called It by Stephen King. The gigantic one about Pennywise the Clown? It's really good, SK is a god, and it makes all these books look even MORE like crap.
On one hand, I'm glad that something remotely interested happened quickly. But yeah, there's virtually no basis for this world. They could have had very similar freak-outs and mysterious hints and still held off on the actual Marking.
...Heck, they could have done some "Drag Me To Hell" thing, where vampires stalked their chosen prey for three days or something, so Zoey spends three days trying to escape.
I know that in first person it's really hard to fit a description of your character in naturally, but I'm getting really tired of this whole 'looking in the mirror to describe myself' thing. I guess it makes sense that Zoey'd want to go check out the Mark, but still that reads less as 'AH I HAVE A HUGE VAMPYRE TATTOO ON MY FOREHEAD' and more like the author wanting to drop a physical description.
To be fair, it was a better description drop than Bella's "I ought to look this way, now let me tell you how I DO look, and in the most flattering adjectives possible". If she had limited it to stuff like "I've normally got a dark complexion, am I turning paler?", meh, but then it went off on the "OH LOOK, I'M CHEROKEE!" rant.
You're right, it was a lot better than any description we get of Bella, especially the ones we get in Breaking Dawn at her wedding and right after she's turned. And I can understand wanting to run to the mirror and check out what the hell you look like after you've been marked. Cast's description just feels like an excuse to infodump on Zoey's appearance, though. But I do have to give her props for not having a (originally) white main character.
Yes. I could see a better start--in fact, a whole book to itself...
She's talking with her friend about running for it. She must run. Then she sees her reflection and OH CRAP THIS IS FOR REAL RUUUUUUN!!! She freaks out and just...takes off.
Then she spends three days in the wilderness, trying to evade the vampyres--three days in which she'd have plenty of time and paper to reflect on her life to that point.
That? Good story. This? Medium-well lameness served with a drizzle of lamesauce, topped with lame.
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Jesus. And by the way, darlin', you keep going on about how you've got distinct Cherokee features. Well, my great uncle was on the Cherokee tribal council. My grandmother speaks the language and lived up with where the Cherokee got relocated in Oklahoma. We're pretty sure I've got a serious dose of Cherokee blood in me, and so does my sister.
You can't tell we're Cherokee. Cherokee features aren't all that dominant when it comes to mingling with the white genes.
*bitchslaps*
Sorry. You saw me go on Catholic Rage, now I had to go on Wagon-Burning-Gut-Eater Rage.
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OK, now I have it out, I'm too lazy to flip through and find what I'm looking for, but the deal with these vampires (or vampyres *sniggers*) is a similar deal to True Blood where everyone knows they exist but no one really likes them, which doesn't make a lot of sense later on.
I don't understand how the Trackers work. I've tried, but everywhere my thoughts lead turn into dead ends.
Amazingly enough you actually get to see her family again at the start of the second book, but I haven't read very much so I'm not sure if it turns into an actual subplot. I do despise the way she describes her siblings. Sure, sometimes I would freaking love to kill my younger brothers, but her attitude grates on my nerves.
And everytime I see "vampyre" I giggle and look around for Annagramma and Mrs Earwig or the De Magpyr family.
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I see. Yeah, I'm betting a lot of money that her siblings are either ridiculously horrible or not nearly as bad as she says.
I know. XD It makes me think we're reading "Pride and Prejudice and Zombies" or something.
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That has got to be the quickest inciting incident EVER. Why couldn't the authors drag out the being Marked thing? This would be a perfect time to actually ADD stalking. It would have added some tension, and get the character to either A) talk about the vampires Marking people and what the humans are doing about it, if it's known or B) have the character muse that this guy is behind a string of disappearances and 'mysterious deaths' only to find out it's this secret group of vampires (wait sorry, vampyres). Both those ideas took me five minutes to figure out and even I could drag those out for at least two or three chapters. It would added some much needed tension and not make the reader go 'So... she's Marked ... uh... so?'. I don't particuarly care that she's Marked because I cannot grasp the significance of being Marked.
Oh and Vampyre is a legit spelling. I've seen it in folklore during my research for mythical monsters.
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...Heck, they could have done some "Drag Me To Hell" thing, where vampires stalked their chosen prey for three days or something, so Zoey spends three days trying to escape.
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She's talking with her friend about running for it. She must run. Then she sees her reflection and OH CRAP THIS IS FOR REAL RUUUUUUN!!! She freaks out and just...takes off.
Then she spends three days in the wilderness, trying to evade the vampyres--three days in which she'd have plenty of time and paper to reflect on her life to that point.
That? Good story. This? Medium-well lameness served with a drizzle of lamesauce, topped with lame.
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