Child Of Grace: Chapter 55 - Child Of Destiny (Part 2)

[zelda_queen]

ZeldaQueen: So yeah, as you all can see, I have inadvertently lied about finishing this tripe by Christmas. I hope you all can find it in your hearts to forgive me, but I've been rather distracted by the shiny copy of 9 Hours, 9 Persons, 9 Doors that I got. It's a great murder mystery and has multiple endings and me being the great survivalist I am

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[turtlecrackers]

Augh! What is it with people emulating Bella Swan? She's not a good rolemodel!

On one hand, I could actually see a fifteen-year-old acting like this. But that would be a spoiled kid who has been raised around no rules and without expectations, and gets huffy when someone finally puts their foot down. Holly, not so much. Not if the backstory with the Dursleys is supposed to be taken seriously.

I have to ask, but was the dramatic in "post dramatic stress disorder" intentional? If so, you rock. XD I think that's very appropriate for the situation with Holly.

[turtlecrackers]

XD Damn. Forgot to close the tag. It was just supposed to be "dramatic" in italics.

[zelda_queen]

"On one hand, I could actually see a fifteen-year-old acting like this. But that would be a spoiled kid who has been raised around no rules and without expectations, and gets huffy when someone finally puts their foot down. Holly, not so much. Not if the backstory with the Dursleys is supposed to be taken seriously."

I know! It doesn't gel at all. What is it with Suethors continuously ignoring their own characterization?

And actually that was a typo. ^^;; Given how Holly's behaving though, I suspect my subconscious *did* realize it fit and had me keep it in.

[turtlecrackers]

Maybe because they don't realize that you have to make a choice. Either have a super-angsty backstory with tons of abuse and neglect, and keep that in the background (even if the character is working to get past that, I don't think it's something you just get over, especially when the character is still a child), or have your confident and bossy little miss princess with entitlement issues. You can't have it both ways.

Well, no, I guess it's possible to have a character who is supposed to have been horribly abused become someone who thinks that they deserve everything they can possibly get once they get away from the abusive environment. But I'd imagine that such a character would be very hard to relate to or sympathize with. /=

Yeah, it fit really well there. XD; I've got to find some way to use that somewhere...

[lurkythespork]

No no no no no...

I have to stop reading in order to write this:

Her godfather gave a dismissive noise. "Those two are just being lazy. They aren't on the edge of a breakdown."

"And I am?" Holly couldn't help but demand, actually feeling the table and dishes rattle before she snapped her shields all the way up. "I'm not falling apart!"Sirius stood up sharply, half-lunging over the table. "Don't," he half-barked, "raise your voice to me in my house

[zelda_queen]

Oh, that was brilliant! Thank you!

[lurkythespork]

All right:

"Your house, your rules then?" Holly shot back, and she couldn't keep the hurt out of her voice. Not completely.

As a parent, that she's being painted as the reasonable and Sirius the unreasonable makes me so angry I want to track down the self-righteous twit writing this and do a Murloc Dance on her head. Excuse me, but the reason why he has a right to make any and all decisions on her behalf is because SHE IS NOT AN ADULT.

Now, if she were out getting a job and paying her way, thinking and ACTING like an adult, then I could accept that she's ready to make adult decisions. Same with any "adolescent".

This whole fic is laced with meadow muffins, but that's a pretty large pile right there. Holly is nothing more than a whiny child, demanding privileges when she's invariably demonstrated she can't be trusted and won't follow through on any logical course of action.

[zelda_queen]

Heck, I'm twenty years old and *I* still do what my parents tell me. Holly is living in HIS house, eating HIS food while HE works hard to provide for her after HE was so kind as to take her in from the abusive Dursleys. So far as we know, she contributes NOTHING of value to the household, and no, offering to wash dishes or cook meals doesn't count. Doesn't work for Bella, doesn't work here

[beacon80]

Y'know, for all their surprisingly reasonable arguments, they're missing the biggest one: Voldemort is trying to kill her! I think that's a good reason to not want to leave her alone. Of course, since there's no blood protection, there's no reason not to get her to the Order HQ as quickly as possible. My only guess is that she A) wants to complain first, and B) doesn't want to have to put up with those horrible Weasley people with their concern and tolerance and lack of money.

[uniswift87]

You know, I just realized that this fic is a lot like Ralph Bakshi's Lord of the Rings. The film assumes the audience already knows the story, so it cuts out important details, much like this fic does. At least the movie is hilariously bad, whereas Child of Grace is just infuriating. Gah.

That said...

I already realized ages ago that Holly was a horrifying mix of Bella Swan and Edward Cullen. Like Bella, she is utterly useless and can't do anything on her own, and like Edward, she's smug and Holier Than Thou and believes it's her right to rifle through people's minds. (That last one makes me really tempted to write a mind reader character who hates being telepathic, just to spite other such characters.) And now, seeing Holly throw a tantrum like Bella did when Edward left in New Moon? That's terrifying. I seriously suspect the Suethor took inspiration from Twilight. Hold me, I'm scared. D:

Never mind how the Suethor pisses on Rowling's lovely canon and then DARES TO CLAIM IT'S BETTER AKFJSFJSDK