Crescendo: Chapter 15 (Part 1)

[zelda_queen]

ZeldaQueen: And now for a chapter that somehow manages to feel entirely pointless, even though it supposedly involves Nora making a breakthrough. Also, warnings - this chapter has it made clear that Nora is aware Patch stalks her, but doesn't care.

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[carakasla]

For crying out loud. Marcie is fucking sixteen. Who cares if she wants to casually date! Hell, if most teens took on that mindset than 'first boyfriend must be TWU LUV', there probably would be a lot less problems! Just because she's sixteen doesn't mean she HAS to start thinking about a big commitment!

...so says the girl who has been in a long term relationship since she was like sixteen. Before anyone calls me a hypocrite, in my defence, neither of us didn't go into the relationship expecting anything long term. It just sorta happened. Plus, with all the weird coincidences and mutual friends (I knew his best friend a whole year before I even met him) we had, I'm sure we would have met and dated eventually anyways. So there.

Vee is horrible. Period. I don't even know why she is even in this series.

And I actually think it's worst that Nora acknowledges Patch's creepy qualities and then completely ignores them. It's just...like Bella's obliviousness you could easily blame on being super sheltered. It like...I don't know. Nora's

[zelda_queen]

"For crying out loud. Marcie is fucking sixteen. Who cares if she wants to casually date! Hell, if most teens took on that mindset than 'first boyfriend must be TWU LUV', there probably would be a lot less problems! Just because she's sixteen doesn't mean she HAS to start thinking about a big commitment

[carakasla]

In real life, Marcie's attitude towards dating would be perfectly normal. It's just here that it's treated as so horrible.

I know it's always argued that books are fantasy and not real, blah blah, but these fantasies simply don't mesh with our morals nowadays, which is where the problem lies. Yeah, sure, they worked in the past but we aren't in the past anymore and women have really different expectations of themselves and their fellow woman now. I'm sorry to any romance writers out there but the genre really needs to grow up.

And considering that NORA kept insisting that she did not want to date and only fell in "love" with Patch because he stalked her endlessly, it seems a tad hypocritical of her to bitch about Marcie's preferences.Man, and I fell for Tidus because he was nice to me and wrote me cheesy poems and ya know, was nice to me. No stalking involved

[anonymous]

this chapter has it made clear that Nora is aware Patch stalks her, but doesn't care.

And yet people still try to claim that she's not a rip-off of Bella Swan.

She will putter around, finally have something halfway interesting happen, and then completely forget about it by the next chapter.

She doesn't even have the excuse of this just being fanfiction with the names swapped out.

Anywho, Vee bitches about the lack of parking and then decides that it'll be fine to park in an employee's only parking lot.

And I bet the car doesn't get towed or ticketed.

At the very least, I know my sixteen-year-old self knew more than this!

I knew more than this at sixteen, and I've never even learned how to drive!

Vee figures that her car will blend right in, as “All these cars speak low class.”

Ana Steele's cluelessness about how the world works and Alice Cullen's snobbery.

This is the clueless teen dating a genuinely creepy guy and being unaware of it because oh look, he's hot and is a fantastic kisser!

I think it was the Fifty Shades

[zelda_queen]

"And I bet the car doesn't get towed or ticketed."

It actually does, but it has no impact besides forcing a contrived scene to happen.

"I think it was the Fifty Shades Darker sporking where someone mentioned that sociopaths are skilled lovers."

I can buy that. Sociopaths are incredibly good at faking emotions and manipulating people.

"I'm wondering how bad her other books must have been."

Her only book before this was Hush, Hush. I think that was less of an incomprehensible mess only because it had fewer plots crammed together in it.

"Wow. I think this might actually be worse than Bella still wanting Edward after finding out about his stalking and his murderous past."

At least Edward did give SOME justification for what he did, even if Mervin did point out how terrible it still was. Nora gives no thoughts as to why Patch may have done these things.

"You left out the "g"."

Fixed, thanks! :D

"I can not be the only one flashing back to Chapter 15 of Eclipse and Fifty Shades of Grey in general."

It's uncanny, isn't it?

[anonymous]

I thought Fitzpatrick had written a few things before Hush Hush That she never had published.

EternalFae

[zelda_queen]

I do know she wrote the first chapter of Hush, Hush in a writing class her husband took her to as a birthday present, and she said on her website how her first foray into storytelling consisted of her sister and she inventing ways to put the school's bullies in a bus and drive them off a cliff. She also mentioned writing things in her journal, so yeah, I guess she did.

[lady_fofa]

When I read this, I couldn't help but think of Rixon as Nixon. Well, the Futurama version would fit in perfectly here.

[zelda_queen]

XD Now I'm picturing Rixon stuck on a robot's body. Lovely.

[lady_fofa]

You're welcome. You probably needed something like that.

[zelda_queen]

XD I really did. Thanks!

[aikaterini]

/It's justified because, as she mentions in a bit, she's doing it to impress her boyfriend

[zelda_queen]

"So…it’s only acceptable to wear skimpy clothes if you’re doing it to impress your male significant other? Implying that if you’re doing it for yourself, that’s bad? Oh, yes, that’s not sexist at all. That doesn’t sound at all reminiscent of Christian’s attitude that Ana can wear skimpy clothes for him, but if she dares to wear them out in public where other men can see her? Burn the witch

[aikaterini]

As a (male) romantic fanfiction writer (yes, this near-mythical beast exists), I often find myself reading these sporkings and comments just so I can know what NOT to do in my own works.