No spaces? Like, how so? (I was having some formatting issues when I posted, and I *thought* I finally had it ironed out... >_<)
Ah, okay. Thanks! XD I know very little about the guy, so as much as I knew, it could have been yet another example of Fitzpatrick having no idea what's hip and current.
"Lawsuit" is pretty much the Word of the Day for this chapter. Just wait until the next section, when you see how the flipping *police* act.
Oops, no. When I wrote the comment, there were no spaces, but when the comment posted and refreshed, the spaces were fixed ^.^
Yeah, I follow his celebrity blog. He is one of the bigger ones out there. I still wouldn't give her points because I never got the impression Nora was someone who paid attention to celebrity news. (I do because I pay attention to EVERYTHING) It would seem more like something Marcie would do. Not to say only people like Marcie watch his blog but...I don't know. It's still out of nowhere.
I actually thought, at the beginning of the chapter, Fitzpatrick wrote this chapter and the previous one out of order :/
I guess research is too much to ask nowadays, huh?
Yeah, that's mainly why it jumped out at me. It's like how we'll later get throwaway mentions of Nora going to a gym or thinking about how she used to play the cello. Not only are those hobbies out of nowhere, but they seem totally out of left field for her character. And I know that there are plenty of people who have past times or like things that don't seem the sort of thing they'd be into, but it doesn't feel like that.
The entire "plot" here is disjointed. Fitzpatrick obviously wanted one of those stories were a bunch of strange, seemingly random events happened, but she forgot to give any consistency or unnoticed patterns.
Yeah, there's a forest near where I live that apparently had at least one Incident (something about a girl dying, I believe? Students used to use it to walk home from school back when said school first opened, now they're generally told to stay away), but it's not actually called anything. People who know the story just tell kids to stay away from it.
I could see a school library having a full computer lab or the like attached, but yeah. Does strike me as a bit odd that an independent one would have the computers set aside. Then again, that kidnapping thing was so stupid I'm going to have to assume the entire library is run by our villains.
... HOW is Nora this STUPID? Holy shit, I think the death thing last book actually DID leave some serious brain damage!
On the elevator thing: Maybe it's a cage front, with glass doors behind it? I dunno. Clearly we've put more thought into this than Fitzpatrick ever did.
1. Yeah, you're not allowed to eat in the library, so Nora should've been told off by the librarian. 2. Why bother with the gas-card? Nora's too stupid to figure out who sent it (being close to Patch ruins your brain, so just snatch her when she's home by herself (where's the mother in all of this?). 3. You had perfectly fine legs, Nora, you didn't need to kill that monitor. 4. Slaughterville is stupid in a morbid sort-of-way, but it's not as confusingly stupid as Cheeseman.
"2. Why bother with the gas-card? Nora's too stupid to figure out who sent it (being close to Patch ruins your brain, so just snatch her when she's home by herself (where's the mother in all of this?)."
The gas card serves no purpose after this, save being brought up by the Big Bad when he's doing his end-of-book gloating. Nora comes nowhere close to solving it, so there's not much point in it at all. And yes, it makes NO SENSE AT ALL for said Big Bad to not just kill her now. In fact, she even ASKS why. The answer sucks, and I'll be ripping into it when that point comes.
The mother is out of town for work, which is the usual way to get rid of her for plot-related reasons. She's pretty much conveniently missing until the start of the next book, so don't get too fussed about her.
One time I read this book that involved a thrilling, high-speed chase on a Georgia freeway - only to have my suspension of disbelief completely shattered when the author breathlessly narrated that her MC floored it and the speedometer went fifty...fifty-five...sixty...
And all I could think was "Wait a minute, you're on a highway in the south and you are going under fifty?" Because let me tell you, the amount of people laying on their horns at her should have made her extremely easy to follow.
Basically, I find Nora being able to ditch an SUV in a small town late at night about that realistic.
Wow. That author must live someplace with horrible traffic issues. 45 is pretty much the minimum speed you need to be going on the interstate. Most people drive 60+ mph in the slow lane.
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And is Perez Hilton still even a thing anymore? Or is Fitzpatrick pulling a We‘re Still Relevant, Dammit?
Um...I still follow Perez Hilton...
Wow. No one noticed the unconscious girl on the floor of the media room/study room before closing up? Can someone say 'lawsuit'?
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Ah, okay. Thanks! XD I know very little about the guy, so as much as I knew, it could have been yet another example of Fitzpatrick having no idea what's hip and current.
"Lawsuit" is pretty much the Word of the Day for this chapter. Just wait until the next section, when you see how the flipping *police* act.
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Yeah, I follow his celebrity blog. He is one of the bigger ones out there. I still wouldn't give her points because I never got the impression Nora was someone who paid attention to celebrity news. (I do because I pay attention to EVERYTHING) It would seem more like something Marcie would do. Not to say only people like Marcie watch his blog but...I don't know. It's still out of nowhere.
I actually thought, at the beginning of the chapter, Fitzpatrick wrote this chapter and the previous one out of order :/
I guess research is too much to ask nowadays, huh?
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Yeah, that's mainly why it jumped out at me. It's like how we'll later get throwaway mentions of Nora going to a gym or thinking about how she used to play the cello. Not only are those hobbies out of nowhere, but they seem totally out of left field for her character. And I know that there are plenty of people who have past times or like things that don't seem the sort of thing they'd be into, but it doesn't feel like that.
The entire "plot" here is disjointed. Fitzpatrick obviously wanted one of those stories were a bunch of strange, seemingly random events happened, but she forgot to give any consistency or unnoticed patterns.
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I could see a school library having a full computer lab or the like attached, but yeah. Does strike me as a bit odd that an independent one would have the computers set aside. Then again, that kidnapping thing was so stupid I'm going to have to assume the entire library is run by our villains.
... HOW is Nora this STUPID? Holy shit, I think the death thing last book actually DID leave some serious brain damage!
On the elevator thing: Maybe it's a cage front, with glass doors behind it? I dunno. Clearly we've put more thought into this than Fitzpatrick ever did.
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2. Why bother with the gas-card? Nora's too stupid to figure out who sent it (being close to Patch ruins your brain, so just snatch her when she's home by herself (where's the mother in all of this?).
3. You had perfectly fine legs, Nora, you didn't need to kill that monitor.
4. Slaughterville is stupid in a morbid sort-of-way, but it's not as confusingly stupid as Cheeseman.
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The gas card serves no purpose after this, save being brought up by the Big Bad when he's doing his end-of-book gloating. Nora comes nowhere close to solving it, so there's not much point in it at all. And yes, it makes NO SENSE AT ALL for said Big Bad to not just kill her now. In fact, she even ASKS why. The answer sucks, and I'll be ripping into it when that point comes.
The mother is out of town for work, which is the usual way to get rid of her for plot-related reasons. She's pretty much conveniently missing until the start of the next book, so don't get too fussed about her.
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And all I could think was "Wait a minute, you're on a highway in the south and you are going under fifty?" Because let me tell you, the amount of people laying on their horns at her should have made her extremely easy to follow.
Basically, I find Nora being able to ditch an SUV in a small town late at night about that realistic.
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