Comments | zarah5: Ficlet/Missing Scene: Intermission

zarah5

Ficlet/Missing Scene: Intermission

Feb 16, 2011 15:34

In my head, this totally happened. Directly related to this post.

Steve/Danny UST: A missing scene of 1x17. Kind of. Maybe just an interpretation.
(PG-13, 452 words)

( Intermission )

fic, h50&fic, h50

Comments 58

mcwilliamsluvr February 16 2011, 15:30:11 UTC

ACK, no, no, no Danny is not grateful that nothing happened! NO, bad Danny! We very much want something to happen! **Sigh** having had my grumble, you did a great job with this....it was very......Danny.

zarah5 February 16 2011, 20:18:35 UTC

Danny isn't even fooling himself. (If it helps, this continues, also in my head, with Steve making an off-hand comment when they're back in the car, and all he says is, "I'm serious, you know." And Danny thinks, Oh.

Thank you! Danny's POV is honestly a lot of fun to write. He's so... I imagine he thinks a lot like he talks. Which is fast, and sometimes close to ranting. *g*

kitmerlot1213 February 16 2011, 15:48:16 UTC

This was PERFECT!!

It did look like Steve tried to protect Danny when the grenade went off and I loved his look of confusion when Danny started yelling at him.

Great work on this :)

zarah5 February 16 2011, 20:19:27 UTC

He totally didn't understand why Danny was yelling at him. It was almost cute. Like a kicked puppy.

Thank you! :D

eleanor_lavish February 16 2011, 15:53:07 UTC

Ahhhhh! Fantastic! That whole scene with the explosion is just so perfectly THEM, and thinking about this underneath it, well. It all makes MORE sense, because this is the gayest show ever to gay. \o/

zarah5 February 17 2011, 06:28:32 UTC

It is a little gem of the gay variety! And all that and so on! *waves hands, beaming*

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zarah5 February 17 2011, 06:29:18 UTC

ME TOO!!! SEVERAL TIMES!!!

I am glad I'm not the only one who thinks so.

mandalaya February 16 2011, 16:18:00 UTC

You wrote it! *does victory lap around room* *to burn off the crazy sexual tension zarah just had Steve and Danny create*

When their gazes meet, Steve smiles very suddenly, and Danny hates to think of him as breathtaking, hates to fall into the same trap as half-drunken clubbers who need only a brief look at Steve to throw themselves at him. But. Most of the time, Steve isn’t even trying, so when he is? Danny doesn’t stand a chance.

And that, okay, that is Danny’s real, actual, number one problem. Because Steve is trying, right now.

Ah, to have such problems. I thought this part was especially good at putting me in Danny's body and incorporating what happening next in the ep: Danny turns on Steve, his chest tight, his heart high in his throat even as he lashes out. It’s possible Steve looks at him for slightly longer than necessary, oddly uncertain, before he simply walks past Danny and back into the shop.

Lovely lovely lovely!

zarah5 February 17 2011, 06:31:20 UTC

I could not resist!!! And, hee, I kept it short, I am so, so proud of myself, you have no idea.

Danny's life: v. hard. He certainly thinks so. Although I'm not sure who's the asshole in this story because Steve is totally serious. At least in my head, and I'm just going to pretend that that's what matters.

mandalaya February 17 2011, 19:18:23 UTC

It's just so great! I mean, writing codas is awesome, but finding a 5 second spot inside the ep to fill and change the read of the ensuing scene somewhat is just so fucking cool and creative, I can't even! Exclamation points! There must be exclamation points!!! :)

And oh yeah, Danny is probably the asshole, because Steve totally isn't messing with his head (at that moment, anyway), he really wanted to be close and was thinking of kissing Danny and not as a throwaway, he always has so much FUN with Danny and their patter with the pawn shop guy was like a well-oiled machine and he is, yeah, getting pretty attached.