Comments | yuri_challenge: That One can Smile and Smile (Revolutionary Girl Utena, Utena/Anthy)

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That One can Smile and Smile (Revolutionary Girl Utena, Utena/Anthy)

Jun 15, 2007 21:37

Title: That One can Smile and Smile
Author: harukami
Fandom: Shoujo Kakumei Utena
Pairing: Utena/Anthy
Rating: PG-13
Request: Revolutionary Girl Utena - Utena/Anthy - lie - "The notion of some infinitely gentle/Infinitely suffering thing"
Summary: Sometimes she has sea dreams while still land-locked.

( That One can Smile and Smile )

creator: harukami, round 03: april 2007 [word prompt], medium: fiction, fandom: shoujo kakumei utena

Comments 8

glazzal June 16 2007, 07:11:15 UTC

Oh. This is gorgeous. I'm past being in awe. What beauty. You've captured their movements, body language, speech, in a very evocative fashion. Yes. I think that is all that needs to be said. :)

harukami June 20 2007, 23:25:07 UTC

Thank you so, so much. Utena fic is always hard to find the right angle to work it at -- I'm really really glad this worked for you. :)

redshoeson June 20 2007, 18:04:59 UTC

I think it's just lovely - the quiet simplicity of it. I especially like the end:

"I don't know. I dreamed of the sea."

"The sea?"

"I think it was freedom."

Anthy looks at her with eyes like sand-worn green glass and asks politely, "Do you feel trapped?"

"Huh? No." Utena is forced to look down into her own cup; the liquid catches the light without obscuring the decal at the bottom. She sips. "No, everything's fine."

Nicely done. :D

harukami June 20 2007, 23:25:34 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm really, really glad you liked it.

wolfie June 20 2007, 22:10:53 UTC

Whee, contrast. I love the meandering way you did this. Thanks.

harukami June 20 2007, 23:26:24 UTC

Thank YOU! I'm really glad you liked it!

puella_nerdii July 1 2007, 06:54:39 UTC

I am so late commenting on this. Bad me. >>

Anyway -- this was one of my prompts, and it is simply FANTASTIC. Disjointed and haunting in a way that perfectly matches the tone of the series. I love the dream motif. Love it love it love it. And the scent of salt water. It fills her lungs like sails is such a vivid and descriptive line. It's sticking with me. Also sticking with me is the phone conversation Anthy has with Akio. It's so understated and perfect. :D

The whole piece is taut and restrained and gorgeous. MAJOR kudos for you, and I'm sorry it took me so long to tell you this.

jailbaitjello November 29 2009, 14:08:28 UTC

This left me feeling a lot like the series left me feeling... a little unsettled and yearning, but not sure what I'm yearning for. I think you definitely captured that lingering unsettled feeling of the series.