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[draft/scrap/ficlet] Saiyuki - Sanzo - PG | looking for a beta

Mar 05, 2009 12:10

So. Today's theme at 31_days looked appealing and I want to try it, but I dare not post a fic without having it betaed first ( Read more... )

saiyuki, saiyuki gojyo, saiyuki sanzo, scribouillage, fanfic, gen-ish

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drakys March 5 2009, 12:56:05 UTC
Real quick before I get working...

golden statues of the Buddha
I think I would phrase it "golden Buddha statues" or "golden statues of Buddha".

Leaving Kinzan behind, he begun a long errand
"he begAn"

he found again walls of stone solid to protect what was important...
Either "solid stone" or "stone solid enought" would sound better.

from cold, from intruders, from danger of any kind
I... I think it's from "the cold". "from cold" makes me think of the sickness, not the weather.

to find his master's sutra, plus quest to save the world
Could be wrong on this but I think "master's sutra and a quest..." would sound better here.

in nameless small village
"in nameless small villageS"

With no just Goku but with Hakkai and Gojyo as well
"With noT just"

it is amongst his crewI think "team" would fit better here. Crew, to me, applies more to a group of workers than a group of travellers/friends (not that they're friends or anything, these four ! XD ( ... )

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ylg March 5 2009, 13:02:00 UTC
Oh god I make even more typos in English than in French. And my spellcheck didn't even catch those D:

Thanks for the corrections! And don't worry, it didn't sound harsh at all ^^

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drakys March 5 2009, 15:50:21 UTC
Maybe your spellcheck is set to French only ?? I know Microsoft Office Word as an auto-detect language thingie but I'm not sure if OpenOffice or whatever else writer-thingie out there got it too... *sort of curious about that now*

No problem ! I hope it helped. ;^^

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ylg March 5 2009, 16:19:28 UTC
It was, but I turned it to "US English" and I thought it would work. That online spellcheckers fail, I understand, but I can't believe Open Office failed as well. Meh.

I'm still not sure about the "statues" and the "walls" bits but yes, it helped. I trust your English skills more than mine ^^"

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