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yeonah

A World Without - Chapter Three

Aug 29, 2010 21:46

Name: A World Without
Fandom: SS501 (appearances by Super Junior)
Pairings: KyuMin, 2HJ, 2YS, friendship!KyuSaeng, friendship!MinSaeng
Total Word Count: 33, 000
Chapters: 3/7 + Epilogue
Rating: PG-16
Warnings: Post-Apocalyptic themes, violence
Genre: Adventure, Romance, and a bit of Crack stirred in
Prompt: "A kiss is a lovely trick, designed by nature ( Read more... )

fandom: super junior, fanfic: a world without, pairing: hyunjoong/hyungjoon, fandom: ss501, pairing: kyujong/jungmin, writing: fanfiction, pairing: yesung/youngsaeng

Comments 18

yeonah August 30 2010, 02:37:29 UTC

And spot for eliradcliffe~!!!

eliradcliffe August 30 2010, 16:54:09 UTC

OMG, a spot for me *sing and dance* I'm happy :D And you can just put "Eli" o "Lizzy"; that's my name, anyways :)

Talking about the chapter, I have to say that the image of Saengie hugging trees is so cute and funny. I love his character, really. His plants, his love for the rain, his emerald eyes... *sigh* Cute~

And inmediately I saw HeeChul's name there, I knew there would be some problems xD

I love this part:

"It's just an elaborate illusion," the drow explained as KyuJong looked down at his hands in amazement. "It'll wear off in ten hours, more than enough time for us to get out of here again. Don't forget to act as well," he warned. "Dreamwalkers are sleepy and easily aggrivated during the day. JungMin knows to pull you away before you have to go too far with the acting, so don't be afraid of snapping at anyone who you think would be testing YoungSaeng's patience at night ( ... )

truecoloured August 30 2010, 03:36:46 UTC

The other man brightened and nodded, heaving a sigh of releif.

should be "relief". this chapter is just as creative as all your previous ones (i'm jealous) but i think you tend to be overly wordy in some places. when you describe their actions it reads nearly mechanically.

lol, i feel like heechul has a posse. i think the scene at the market was the most interesting.

hyunaepark August 30 2010, 04:04:21 UTC

OHMYFLUFF.
KYU.
TURN INTO AN ACTOR. QUICK.
D8]
fluffing heechil T~T

mochi_501x August 30 2010, 06:29:11 UTC

OMG THE ENDING! /dies

katherine_15 August 30 2010, 13:10:54 UTC

Jungminnie's protectiveness!! *SQUEES* The rain scene with YS was so magical! aaah, really love this series, am waiting with bated breath for the next GORGEOUS update!