[FIC/NC17] Millionaire's Ex-Fiance chap.4

[yamada_masaki]

Title: Millionaire's Ex-Fiance
Author: yamada masaki aka gunkie
Genre: Angst, Romance
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Yoosu, Broken YunJae, slight JaeSu
Summary: Park family promised to the Kim that they would marry their first child to Kim’s only child-Kim JunSu. Since the first child was a guy so they gave their second child as replacement. But remember, "A

Comments

[sleeplesshadow]

I read the chapters all in one go because the idea of Junsu being Yoochun's ex fiancé sounds pretty interesting. ^^
I'm going to be really honest, I feel slightly disappointed as I read the chapters in one go. I'm not trying to push you down or something because I think you have very nice ideas and I would love to read this story.
The part between Micky and Xiah is kind of messy because they sometimes called each other by Chunnie and Su baby. In that way, Junsu and Yoochun must have know each other's names since childhood.
And, you wrote in previous chapter that Junsu telling Amber he is 1000% straight and did have a girlfriend. As I read in this chapter, Amber knew Junsu has an ex-boyfriend by the name Micky.

For this part in the previous chapter. It confused me.
And the two played soccer together till the evening came. They promised each other to meet again and having a soccer match.

But the time, which had separated them, never give them chances to meet once againDo you mean Xiah and Micky did not have chances to meet each

[yamada_masaki]

sorry for making you confused bb >.< *is bowing*
please take a look at the explanation in this link:
http://yamada-masaki.livejournal.com/12525.html

and please don't say that ;)
being honest never make anyone hurt..
i love that you are being honest to me ^_~
dun worry..
and dun hesitate to ask if you find any difficulties to understand the story, okay?
thanks for commenting bb <3

[karmentvxq]

you make my weekend so good, I read it in the morning and then left some lines (half of chapter) for the noon. Ohh it was so great, but how is Jae going to react to the truth about SeulGi and Changmin is going to be a important part somewhere (sorry to say that) anytime soon?

[yamada_masaki]

really? I'm glad of it ;)
hihihihi JaeJoong will be fainted? xD
take a guess bb!
yep, i'll try to update ASAP!
thankies and huggies from me <3

[devjacaiora]

the beginning of happy Yoosu? lol