[Constructive critism, ne? (just like me xD) Eeto... Well, I think it's good. Really. But perhaps (that's just my taste though) make Ruki a little.. less sqealy and uke-ish? I mean, even if he's being the uke, it doesn't necessarily mean he's acting it. Hmm... Nothing else to point out.
Oh, and it's written massage.
Don't take it personally or anything, it was just some pointers! >3<]
hehe...i guess i like Ruki as a sqealy and uke-ish person...>///< i just thought it was cute for him to be uke...and Reita in complete control for once...but i'll think bout it~~~
o_o oopsies...my bad..typos XP
nopes~ i wont~ its good to have ppl telling me how to improve =)
..Now I think that that wasn't really something that should've been said from me at all. xD So totally... offtopic, in a way. >_> gomen, ne. Of course - it's fiction. One writes their characters differently. :3 *nod* Ruki was cute, though. :3
Forgive me my speechlessness at teh moment, but ... I think this was pretty daaaaaaaaaamn hot <3_________<3 u just had to leave it RIGHT there, when the fun was just starting? XDD even though, I don't blame u, i still like this too <3 keep up the good work!~
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Even if you stopped right when it was getting..interesting.
Yay! for 'active' relationships^^
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Active relationship~~~!!!
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good God, you're practically a saint!!!
lool
it was hot and sweet and i loooooooove it!!!!!! =DDDDDDD
i should have bdays more often... u guys are pampering me so much >x)
thank you~~~
<3333
bestest bday EVAR! x3
u guys rawk <3
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i guess i dont mind being saint hehe~
awhh~~ im glad you loved it!!!
lol
maybe you should ....there is this chinese date that says its 'everyones bday' XD
your welcomes~~
happy bday ne!
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That was hot ~
And really good!
*is already late with her present for Mari-sama*
[Constructive critism, ne? (just like me xD)
Eeto... Well, I think it's good. Really. But perhaps (that's just my taste though) make Ruki a little.. less sqealy and uke-ish? I mean, even if he's being the uke, it doesn't necessarily mean he's acting it.
Hmm... Nothing else to point out.
Oh, and it's written massage.
Don't take it personally or anything, it was just some pointers! >3<]
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hehe...i guess i like Ruki as a sqealy and uke-ish person...>///<
i just thought it was cute for him to be uke...and Reita in complete control for once...but i'll think bout it~~~
o_o oopsies...my bad..typos
XP
nopes~ i wont~ its good to have ppl telling me how to improve =)
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So totally... offtopic, in a way. >_> gomen, ne.
Of course - it's fiction. One writes their characters differently. :3 *nod*
Ruki was cute, though. :3
Typos.. irritating, ne?
good, good. ^^
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it nice to know other ppl's opinions~~~
^^
thx~
yes...they are irritating!
and i always miss them too....-____-
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at teh moment, but ...
I think this was pretty daaaaaaaaaamn
hot <3_________<3
u just had to leave it RIGHT there,
when the fun was just starting? XDD
even though, I don't blame u,
i still like this too <3
keep up the good work!~
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its ReixRu...how can it not be hot???
XPPP
yea...i might ruin it if i contiued...but if i get the mood to write a sequel...^^;
thxx hon~!
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i can too~!
thanks ne!
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