Oh my god, you wrote a fic!!!! I'm so deadly happy!! (Ive found a few grammatical and spelling errors, but I don't think I will nit-pick them... I'm not yet good enough in english to beta or anything. >_< Gomen!)
ZOMG Tezuka jealous is LOVE!! And how unusual, Fuji is changing... I can't wait for the rest! Please update soon! =)
i know,,, i think i missed some grammar and spelling when i check it it my word,, it even made me more confuse... so i let it be raw~~
no, please.. if you think there some mistakes please tell me, i'll correct it as soon as possible *bow* it really do help me a lot,,, since we all are still learning^^ 8bows* thx for commenting...
now i'm still figuring out what to do next,,, have any ideas?? well that's the main plot of this,,, fuji is changing ^^, i guess living 5years with tezuka made him that way... but i hope i dont change him that much -_- *gomen if i do*
>_< I understand your situation! When I started writing, Ay1_Puff and Tacuma811 both nit-picked me, and I improved a lot. ^^ So I guess I will tell you a few...
'Every morning, Tezuka would wake up founding Fuji already in the kitchen reading newspaper.' It must be 'finding Fuji...'
'Fuji starts to read newspaper or watch afternoon news, which is really “usually’ it had been Tezuka’s afternoon habit. should be "which is 'usually' Tezuka's afternoon habit."
'As he smiled and gave a kiss is Tezuka’s peck.' It should be either 'and gave Tezuka a kiss' or 'and kissed Tezuka' or 'and pecked on Tezuka's cheek' or something. ^^
Thats about it... the rest are minor errors. ^^
OMG can you make next chappie something like Tezuka noticed that Fuji spends less and less time with him due to work/friend/school anything? I'd LOVE to see Tez jealous!! ^___^
thank you tooo *bows* happy birthday \\^_^//, *did you celebrate it??*
maa~~ now i'm stuck XP hahaha yes i'll continue for you XD,, i hope the next one will be more better... *thinking for a next chapt for this prologue* mysterious hmmm.. lets just see XD
it's not bad at all! in fact, it's really good! :D i see fuji's symptoms.. it's called 'i-wanna-start-a-family symptom XD can't wait for the next chapter to come!
by the way, shouldn't Yumiko's son be fuji's nephew, not cousin? ^^;
This is a good start! Thanks for writing, only way you can develop and hone your writing skills. I encourage you to continue, just be careful with your sentence construction and spellings.
I commend you for finally posting your work...keep on going and I look forward to your work.
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(Ive found a few grammatical and spelling errors, but I don't think I will nit-pick them... I'm not yet good enough in english to beta or anything. >_< Gomen!)
ZOMG Tezuka jealous is LOVE!! And how unusual, Fuji is changing... I can't wait for the rest! Please update soon! =)
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when i check it it my word,, it even made me more confuse... so i let it be raw~~
no, please.. if you think there some mistakes please tell me, i'll correct it as soon as possible *bow* it really do help me a lot,,, since we all are still learning^^ 8bows*
thx for commenting...
now i'm still figuring out what to do next,,,
have any ideas??
well that's the main plot of this,,, fuji is changing ^^, i guess living 5years with tezuka made him that way...
but i hope i dont change him that much -_- *gomen if i do*
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'Every morning, Tezuka would wake up founding Fuji already in the kitchen reading newspaper.' It must be 'finding Fuji...'
'Fuji starts to read newspaper or watch afternoon news, which is really “usually’ it had been Tezuka’s afternoon habit. should be "which is 'usually' Tezuka's afternoon habit."
'As he smiled and gave a kiss is Tezuka’s peck.' It should be either 'and gave Tezuka a kiss' or 'and kissed Tezuka' or 'and pecked on Tezuka's cheek' or something. ^^
Thats about it... the rest are minor errors. ^^
OMG can you make next chappie something like Tezuka noticed that Fuji spends less and less time with him due to work/friend/school anything? I'd LOVE to see Tez jealous!! ^___^
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I really want to know why Fuji changed, this fic kinda mysterious, ne XDD
I waiting for the next chapter^^
Thanks for sharing^^
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happy birthday \\^_^//, *did you celebrate it??*
maa~~ now i'm stuck XP
hahaha yes i'll continue for you XD,, i hope the next one will be more better... *thinking for a next chapt for this prologue*
mysterious hmmm.. lets just see XD
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i see fuji's symptoms.. it's called 'i-wanna-start-a-family symptom XD
can't wait for the next chapter to come!
by the way, shouldn't Yumiko's son be fuji's nephew, not cousin? ^^;
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congratz, you read my mind!!
hahahhahaaaaaa
i knew it,,, so its nephew ^^ thx
i'll change it *bows*
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I commend you for finally posting your work...keep on going and I look forward to your work.
Cheers, j
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I really like it! I wanna know what will happen next!!
I wanna know why Fuji changed! ^___^
"wasabi is FUJI" So true!
It's a really good start, can't wait for more!
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