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weekly challenge one ;

Jul 30, 2013 22:18

Title: -
Pairing: Suho/Chanyeol
Rating: G
Genre: Dystopia
Length: 2.5k
Summary/Warnings: Suho's world isn't all he thought it to be.

a/n: unedited word vomit. my brain is completely dead bc school so forgive me ;n;

( your basic cliched dystopia fic under the cut )

rating: g, length: one-shot, author: gravitateme, weekly challenge #1, pairing: suho/chanyeol

Comments 13

anonymous July 30 2013, 10:59:56 UTC

spooky and earie omg *-* would love to read a continuation of this.

anonymous July 30 2013, 11:00:19 UTC

eerie* oops

gravitateme August 3 2013, 03:27:49 UTC

maybe T_T thank you for the comment!!

anonymous July 30 2013, 12:21:56 UTC

oh my god i really really like this idk why ;; this is just eerie and spooky and i have SO MANY QUESTIONS whirring inside my head and i'd love to read a continuation of this ;~; suho's characterization in here is top notch because for 1) he isn't the 'good guy' and 2) he makes me laugh lmfao. chanyeol is too and welps this is so good ;~;

gravitateme August 3 2013, 03:27:38 UTC

;_____; thank you for the comment!!

anonymous July 30 2013, 16:33:19 UTC

This was really interesting... I hope you continue it because I'd love to learn more about the revolution! maybe the sequel could cover Joonmyun's inner conflicts about sympathizing with the rebels, but his duty to the inner city? ;o;

I feel like since I'm giving you feedback I should include some constructive criticism so... Be careful with tenses because I noticed there was a part that you slipped in between present and past tense (and there were a few typos, but I'm sure you'll catch them once you edit)! Also the formatting made it a bit difficult to read (sry I'm picky about formatting)....

But you did a good job of balancing information about the setting with the action, and the pacing was great! A little more description would have been nice, but that's just a personal choice and all in all I really liked this. ;;

gravitateme August 3 2013, 03:27:22 UTC

thank you for the feedback anon!! <3

i write fics in both past and present tense so i'll def pay more attention in future to prevent slip ups in tense errors and typos too!! orz

i agree about the formatting, i just copied and pasted it from a doc and it looked alright in ms word but here... ;; thank you for pointing it out tho!!

but really, thank you for this thoughtful comment^^^

anonymous July 30 2013, 23:51:34 UTC

oh my god this is so good ;;o;; i really love dystopia AUs and CHANHO *-----* it would be lovely if there's a continuation of this;;;

gravitateme August 3 2013, 03:24:28 UTC

thank you anon!! we'll see if i have time ;n;

kfangirl4 July 31 2013, 05:25:01 UTC

Please continue this I want to read more please

gravitateme August 3 2013, 03:24:12 UTC

; u ; maybe if i have time