Comments | wyntermute: The World is Ending, but I’m Eighteen

wyntermute

The World is Ending, but I’m Eighteen

Feb 06, 2008 12:39

It's for experimental fic like this that I wish I had someone to bounce ideas off of in real life. So that someone could say Gah! Stop jumping through time! or Pick a verb tense and stick with it! or Don't write entire fics in one night because they make no sense and then you get sick from staying up until 3 in the morning.Also... First time ( Read more... )

fic, the world is ending but i'm eighteen, naruto

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premium_shaday February 6 2008, 18:24:51 UTC

I'm sooo crushed right now.
Just... gah.
Oh, Tenten. You're alive and filled with Joy!!

Is there a sequel? Please? Where Neji's all "BYAKUGAN!! Oh, I just sealed you into a rock, Kyuubi!! What now?" So the future's safe and he's the Hokage and Tenten is all, "Make good on your promise, ho!!" So they have kids and live happily ever after?

Please?

wyntermute February 7 2008, 21:52:43 UTC

No sequel, unfortunately. :P I like where it ended -- the reader can fill in the rest as they desire! Besides, this way gets the point across a bit more. (I hope!)

Thanks for reading! :D

davoun February 6 2008, 20:06:31 UTC

I loved it. it was very powerful really deep and meaningful. it really got the point accross about living for the day. it was amazing! you write beautifuly please right more!

wyntermute February 7 2008, 21:54:15 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the fic! (And got one of the themes I was going for -- good to know!) :D

ant_power February 7 2008, 04:11:23 UTC

Oh wow. This is super-awesome! I nearly cried in the bit where she hugged Lee, and I LOLed when Lee said she was mysterious because nobody knew her last name. There is so much in here that I love. The image of Kakashi stumbling back into Konoha was really vivid and I really liked the scene with Gai watching the stars, and Neji at the campsite. I'm also really impressed (probably because I can't do it myself) that you did it all so well in first person. I don't think you need a RL person at all, you did just fine on your own!

wyntermute February 7 2008, 21:57:39 UTC

I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed it! (Especially happy you liked the Gai and Neji scenes -- I was worried people would want less backstory and more sweet sweet apocalypse. ;)

(I almost cried while writing the Lee part at the end too. :P )

ant_power February 8 2008, 00:36:10 UTC

No, not at all. I thought the backstory was good. I mean, if it were the end of the world, you'd be thinking back a lot, and it sort of read more like it was the story of Tenten with the apocalypse tying it all together.

The Lee part was too sad!!!