Comments | wyncatastrophe: Revising Freefall

wyncatastrophe

Revising Freefall

Oct 10, 2011 22:21

So, the only person who has answered my call for feedback to date is hikarific -- thank you so much, hikari! Your insights have been more helpful than I know how to say. Text revisions are only in the planning stages (I'm kicking around ideas for how to improve the tone/context of early scenes), but I had this one idea for re-framing the story, and I ( Read more... )

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wyncatastrophe October 11 2011, 16:35:51 UTC

I guess I'm worried that it might be a little too long to fit into the "summary" boxes on AO3 and FFN … I could cut it down somehow, and then put the "long" version as a note at the beginning of the story? Like the STAR WARS opening crawl, teehee!

I'm looking for a way of setting up the story for readers so that they aren't expecting it to be a kind of story that it isn't. I've received enough comments to get the impression that most readers who open the story are expecting an Anakin/OC romance, which it isn't, so the people who might have enjoyed that are disappointed, and then other potential readers who don't an OC romance - probably the majority of the fandom - just don't click at all. So I feel like somehow the introduction that I have is setting up the wrong expectations - false advertising, as you might say.

Warm fuzzies are made of win! I can't wait to see what you might have to say about Gravity … but at the same time I'm nervous, because I think it's probably the weakest story in the FFV, and I have a lot of anxiety ( ... )

veronicaprof October 12 2011, 05:29:57 UTC

I like the intro very much! Forgive me for my slowness in providing feedback -- I'm woefully behind on so many things right now and trying to keep up with social connections has had to take a back burner while dealing with multiple campus and teaching responsibilities....

But hey, the History Club trip is over! :) It went well despite some unforeseen challenges (we were stuck on Interstate 81 for more than three hours in standstill traffic due to a bad accident ahead, but at least we were not involved in said accident), and the restaurant lost our reservation for Sat. nite, but all went well anyway.

Hope all is well with you -- I'm still catching up.

wyncatastrophe October 13 2011, 00:24:10 UTC

Thank you for responding! I'm glad the intro makes sense for you. Have you read Freefall? I was rather under the impression that you hadn't, but then I tend to assume that of everybody. I'm not at all convinced that it is a good introduction to the FFV -- readers seem determined to start with it, either because it was actually the first posted (but few readers have been with me long enough for that to be an issue), or because it chronologically precedes the rest of the happenings in the 'verse: that is, everything else is contingent on the meeting of two people, by accident or fate, in a way that fundamentally changes one of them. But Freefall could perhaps more productively have been introduced later, as a "prequel" to the other events of the story -- FFV, I have discovered, works much better as a story cycle than it does as a linear progression. Of course, that's a contention that's up for grabs, and I'm working through it as I go (thereby frustrating readers ( ... )