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ankewehner April 8 2011, 10:35:43 UTC
This is decidedly creepy.

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wyld_dandelyon April 8 2011, 10:45:19 UTC
Thank you!

(I'd worry if you found it uplifting.)

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seekerval April 8 2011, 11:56:05 UTC
Well done twisty-sneaky stuff. I liked the child form's efforts to enhance her small available magic by the erratic swinging and inaccurate singing.

Have you met my older sister?

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wyld_dandelyon April 8 2011, 12:04:48 UTC
Thank you.

As to your sister, I don't know--if she goes to conventions, it's possible.

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seekerval April 8 2011, 15:52:49 UTC
No, Deirdre, she wouldn't go to conventions. (I once had to write a long letter to her explaining why D & D role playing was NOT the work of the devil. I'm not sure I convinced her and she'd definitely look askance at large gatherings of SF & F folk.)

The question was a poorly executed attempt to suggest that the sneaky-evil sister in your story reminded me of that particular sister of mine. Sigh. My written personal jokes have been falling flat lately. Maybe I'd best rein in that urge-to-quip for a while. : > }

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wyld_dandelyon April 8 2011, 20:18:22 UTC
Oh, dear, didn't mean to squelch your fun! Quip away.

When I was a kid, my brother taught me, all too well, an automatic reflex to react to quips in ways that, well, squelched his fun, seeing as how the fun from quips he shared with me was nearly always at my expense. Now, of course, as often as not, the reflex serves me poorly.

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Stupendous story! ext_210743 April 8 2011, 14:04:23 UTC
Deirdre, I cannot believe, with all the magic floating around, that I didn't see that twist coming at all. Stupendous work, I love it!

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Re: Stupendous story! wyld_dandelyon April 8 2011, 20:29:00 UTC
Thank you!

I'm glad you stopped by!

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John Wiswell, http://johnwiswell.blogspot.com anonymous April 8 2011, 14:47:28 UTC
Congratulations on finishing something before Saturday! I can tell you have an affection for this world through your descriptions and the central relationship.

“Mother-I-we thought you a prisoner.”

“I was-I-“

I'm not certain how to read these lines. I think they're supposed to be read as stammering. In the LJ setup, the dashes are very long, though copying and pasting them shortens them up.

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Re: John Wiswell, http://johnwiswell.blogspot.com wyld_dandelyon April 8 2011, 20:27:29 UTC
It would be nice to have more control over things like font here.

Thanks for stopping by!

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tigertoy April 8 2011, 19:32:49 UTC
That's a lot of story in such a short piece. Raising chaos as a workable force by singing the alphabet song out of order and swinging erratically is a really cool idea. The betrayal surprised me as much as it did poor Lilyana. I'm left wanting to explore the story in more depth, in the hope that either there's another side to it, or that if it's as sad as it seems, this isn't actually the end.

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wyld_dandelyon April 8 2011, 20:24:30 UTC
Thank you.

At least there's some hope for another twist in her fate with this ending. :-D

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