Beta notesdrgaellonSeptember 22 2007, 20:08:53 UTC
It was one thing to accidentally humiliate yourself in front of other, should be others
Scorpius had went out shopping should be gone out
a Great Wizarding tradition. Either capitalize the t in tradition, or uncapitalize the G and W.
What Potter? comma after "What"
didn’t make him looked should be look
Lubes in my right pocket. should be Lube's
actively looking for him maybe should be looking for them
Lily owled us the photo’s no apostrophe in "photos"
The boy’s look awful red no apostrophe in "boys"; proper English requires "awfully" (you can leave it if you intended it to be dialect/slang, but in my head, Draco never speaks less than perfectly)
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Scorpius had went out shopping should be gone out
a Great Wizarding tradition. Either capitalize the t in tradition, or uncapitalize the G and W.
What Potter? comma after "What"
didn’t make him looked should be look
Lubes in my right pocket. should be Lube's
actively looking for him maybe should be looking for them
Lily owled us the photo’s no apostrophe in "photos"
The boy’s look awful red no apostrophe in "boys"; proper English requires "awfully" (you can leave it if you intended it to be dialect/slang, but in my head, Draco never speaks less than perfectly)
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