Short Vignette

[writn_fool]

This is a version of the story that I entered into the NPR Program All Things Considered's Three-Minute Fiction contest. I didn't win, but that's okay. I'd like some concrit, please.

Lessons of History
By: writn_fool He swore it on his mother’s grave. When he reached the golden land of America, he’d be a success; become somebody. Not for him was the

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[lunanightkiss]

that was really good. got me at the end with how he did the same to his boss in the past. i really likd it. i posted some short stories up, and wish you would read them and comment. bt other than that, this story was well written, interesting, and seemed like a lesson was learned. really nice.

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[writn_fool]

Thanks! I'll try to stop by in the next couple of days and look at your work!

[rephen]

Compact, aptly written, though the length and breadth took away some of the drama in the story. Seems hurried, at some parts.

I enjoyed it, though.

[writn_fool]

Thank you! I did have a 300 - 600 word limit, and trying to fit a full story in that amount is still something I'm working on.

Glad you liked!

[rephen]

I know! I can't believe you got that out in under 3 minutes, with that kind of word-restrictions!

Very well done, really :)

[chewonit]

Its great!
I love how choppy it was cause i ended so well.

[writn_fool]

Thanks!