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"Sever the Ties That Bind Us" -- (Part 01/?) -- Harry Potter, Snarry

Apr 01, 2007 21:07

Fandom: Harry Potter
Title: "Sever the Ties That Bind Us" - Part One
Characters: Harry/Snape, Harry/Ron, Hermione
Words: 2629
Rating: R ((sexuality))
Disclaimer: If it screams of JKR, it's hers. Such a shame.

Notes: While "Sever" follows canon up until Harry's fifth year, it begins to diverge about a month into his school year ( Read more... )

sever the ties that bind us, harry potter, snarry

Comments 11

hallwaydancer April 2 2007, 02:04:56 UTC

Ooooooo! Yay for The Snarry!

-GC

writingpuck April 3 2007, 03:55:58 UTC

Heee- it's strange-- I was trying to avoid a Harry/Draco idea I'd had, it ended up Snarry, which I've never read/written before. So it's as much a surprise for me as anyone else, lols.

But thanks!

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writingpuck April 3 2007, 03:58:43 UTC

Thanks! Yeah, Harry/Ron screams innocence to me, no matter which way you slice it-- not one of the pairing's I've ever favored, but it's always fun to toss in something random. ^^

As a side-note, I really love your icon!

moreslash4me April 3 2007, 21:00:51 UTC

Interesting start. I'm not sure where this in going but you have me hooked. ;) Keep up the good work.

writingpuck April 4 2007, 02:16:22 UTC

Thanks so much!

hambares April 4 2007, 00:21:24 UTC

Part 2 soon? Need to know more!!!

writingpuck April 4 2007, 02:17:43 UTC

Thank you! -- I'm going to try to post Part Two tonight, with a little bit of luck. ^^

anonymous April 4 2007, 03:27:03 UTC

A concrit: your style reads very choppy because of the incredible number of commas you use and your habit of stringing together incomplete sentences. I think you're trying for a unique style, but it comes off as very difficult to read, which is too bad because I think you might have a good story here.

If I could read it without getting a headache, that is.

Not trying to flame; just offering some concrit that I hopes makes the story clearer.

-- Becca

writingpuck April 4 2007, 22:46:47 UTC

It's an anon comment, so I'm not sure you'll get this, but it never hurts to respond to a reader anyways, right?

Thanks for spending the time to offer what you feel will be constructive advice. While I feel that not every style can appeal to every reader, I'll keep your suggestions in mind when I re-edit this (unfortunatly, I'm currently beta-less and working this story solo, so it make take some time).

Thanks once again for stopping by. ^^

_Reggie_