[POTC holiday fic] - KINGDOMS OF THE SWAN companion vignette - "Frankicense for the King" - 2/3 - R

[writing_samsara]

A/N: Ok ya’ll, here’s part two as promised, with three well in the works. Once again, this baby is a bit rough around the edges, but hey, at least it’s here, right? This story is a vignette that can stand alone if need be, but I’ve envisioned it as a story existing a little ways into the future of my “Kingdoms of the Swan” (KotS) universe - so,

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[writing_samsara]

Oh, thank you so much! I'm thrilled that you like my take on Jack's background - it sort of stuck after spying Jack "meditating" in DMC, and it's been fun to write because it allows me to bring POTC a bit closer to home.

Thank you so much, again! :)

[salr323]

Woohoo! :) So glad to see this, I've been looking forward to it. And very lovely it is. Jack's deconstruction is very poigniant; the idea that he thinks himself only acceptable to Elizabeth when he's disguised as someone else is quite heart breaking.

She tilted, ready. Closer - just a breath, and then…

Oh, you tease! :) Lovely, lovely moment, that almost-kiss. What was Lizzie thinking, to be asking all those visitors? Can't wait for the last chapter! Fab work.

[writing_samsara]

Oh, thank you so, so much! I'm so glad that you're enjoying this, and that you caught the bits of heartbreak beneath the cheer and silliness.

And yeah, I'm a horrible tease. *winks* Can't help myself.

Still trying to plunk out C.3 - and I'm hoping to post it this weekend, if all goes well.

Thank you so much for reading, again - and Happy New Year!

(And now I'm off to catch up on your fic! *squeals* My stupid internet has been down, and I've missed updates, dammit!)

Writing Question

[tiamary]

Can't help asking a writerly question here, as someone getting back into writing after a long break (writerly is not a word but hey if Jack can make up words...). What is the purpose, in your opinion, of the tease at the end of a chapter or episode of a serialized television show, particularly when it's something the reader or viewer has been waiting on for awhile? Is it primarily to get the reader or viewer to keep reading or viewing, or to illustrate something about the characters, such as they're not ready yet? (i.e., would Jack have stopped when people appeared at the door if he had really been ready to take the step?).

Re: Writing Question

[writing_samsara]

Oh, *squee* for a writerly question (great word, writerly - poetic license being what it is and all)! I love to talk writing even more than I enjoy talking about pirates, and that's saying something

[akarii]

This:

A lime and a mango had been sliced and fanned in smiling arches on a chipped china plate,

and this:

I’d much prefer not to expire in a blaze of duck-” he flailed, searching for a word, “of duck - oh, sod it - of a bloody, damnable poultry fire!”

and this:

she couldn’t think on it because his mouth was suddenly a whisper from hers. She felt her eyes flutter shut, her lips already remembering the texture of his mouth.

a very, very happy akarii make. Splendid, hun!

Muah =3 !

[writing_samsara]

Oh, thank you so much! I'm so happy that you enjoyed everything. *g*

And thanks for picking out some of my "darlings" - always a boost to see that the writing is as enjoyable as the plot. *hugs*

[kseenaa]

Ah... Nice. Really nice. I like Teague. I am glad you put him in this story to. :-) He is a cool man. And the sister? Good lord! I love her! *cheers*

[writing_samsara]

Oh, thanks so much, love! I'm so glad that you're still enjoying the story.

And yay for Teague! :) I haven't really written about him until now, but he's really got a place in Kingdoms of the Swan, so hopefully I can pull it off. :)

Also, I'm so, so happy that you like Sara. She's my pet OC, and I just can't seem to keep myself from writing her into my stories.

Thanks so much, and Happy New Year!

[hereswith]

It's always a pleasure to immerse oneself in the world you create, the scents, the tastes, the colours, the details, all so vivid, and this is certainly no exception :-) This is lovely and funny, too. I really liked the scene between Elizabeth and Sara, and the whole last bit, Jack with the stew, angry at her for disappearing, Elizabeth's amusement and then the moment of tension, is most wonderful.

I have to mention the descriptions of that brief journey, as well, because both struck me as especially evocative. The ocean winked its glassy eye as she rowed, the water grayed and weary beneath a dove-bellied sky. Her oars stirred the water in silver pockets, the smattering of froth and bubble like tumbling coins in the tempered light of a shrouded noon. And later: The cloud-cover of midday had fractured, cracked like an egg to reveal a saffron yoke of sunlight. Turquoise and coral, the clouds now marbled the sky, anything but sullen as they looped in elegant curls across the ripe-peach haze of approaching dusk.

[writing_samsara]

Thank you so, so much for reading and commenting! Your input is always so uplifting - a real day-maker. :)

I'm so glad that everything came together for you while still managing to be fun. Sometimes it's more difficult to write the lighthearted moments than the heartache and turmoil.

And thank you, so much, for commenting on my darlings (cited diction). Ot's really a thrill to know that beneath all of the character-making and plotty-goodness, the language still shines.

*hugs*

[hereswith]

*hugs back* And a belated Happy New Year!