Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment - I really appreciate it, especially knowing that my general shipping tendencies are different from yours. Glad that both the style and the characterization worked for you. There's such much there, between all of them, and I really do love each of these characters - just happen to write about Will a little bit less, so there's always a challenge there, especially when the POV is such that all of the horror of his current situation is sort of subtextual and in the periphery.
Aw, now I'm sad for Jack. However, I was a little creeped out by "it was an accident that she fell in any case," even more so thatn the actual fight.
I really felt your story. In that moment, she thought him the ugliest man alive is a perfect description of how one's emotions affects the other perceptions. I also liked Saltwater shot up her nose - it's such a sharp sensation that everyone's felt, it really conjures up strong emotion. The way her grief progressed to encompass more and more seemed very realistic, too.
I'm glad that the creepiness of Jack's internal rationalization came through. I almost didn't add it in because I thought it might be too creepy, but decided to keep it as it's that thing real people do when they've crossed a sort of line, even if somewhat unbeknownst to themselves except on a subconscious level. I didn't want to make Jack into this abusive jerk, but I did want him to acknowledge, in a roundabout way, how things got out of hand. She's intent on hurting him ebcause she can, because the rage has to go somewhere - and Jack, Jack's just so focused on not losing control that he (wouldn't you know) loses control....
Rambling, rambling....
I'm so glad that you enjoyed the story - that theportrayal of their skewed perceptions, mounting grief, and general water-log came through.
Thanks so much for your lovely comments. It's made my day! :)
I adore this. Your writing is, as always, beautiful and you capture their pain so well without overstating it.
I love the depth of feeling you give Jack, while maintaining the exterior we all recognise. And your Elizabeth is very interesting, ill at ease with her choices and almost seeming, to me, unbalanced. Fascinating. Can't wait for the next one!
You're very sweet. I'm still finding my feet in this fandom, and feel like I'm just warming up. I need to get under the characters' skin a little more before I can really write well.
I love the idea of Elizabeth needing to 'find herself' as we'd say in the twenty-first century! It's very true, especially for a woman who has always had a man to define her role.
But you are going to break Jack's heart, and consequently mine, when she leaves him! That's okay, though, because I'm all for some exquisite pain, just so long as you bring them back together in the end!
This is a wonderful series, you have a great deal of talent. We J/E shippers are lucky indeed!
"I'm still finding my feet in this fandom, and feel like I'm just warming up. I need to get under the characters' skin a little more before I can really write well
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That was very creepy, very emotional, and (in a way) sweet piece. You have made a good point: that the life us Sparrabeth shippers wish for them to have cannot be maintained forever.
Well, I didn't mean that they couldn't work forever, I just meant that they could not sail off into the sunset to have OMGZ-PIRATE-ADVENTURES! forever.
Oh no, no darlin - didn't mean my little ramble as a sort of rebuttal. Just took the very valid point you made and ran of on my little excited tangent. Sorry for my bit of inarticulateness. I blame it on a day of laundry. ;)
As a sidenote, I totally agree. I think the most fun is seeing how the OMG-TOTAL-HAPPINESS-AND-LACK-OF-CONFLICT falls apart, how these two are "rea", complex people. Issues are fun! ;)
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Thanks much, again!
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I really felt your story. In that moment, she thought him the ugliest man alive is a perfect description of how one's emotions affects the other perceptions. I also liked Saltwater shot up her nose - it's such a sharp sensation that everyone's felt, it really conjures up strong emotion. The way her grief progressed to encompass more and more seemed very realistic, too.
I love dark!Jack, so this was great. Thanks!
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I'm glad that the creepiness of Jack's internal rationalization came through. I almost didn't add it in because I thought it might be too creepy, but decided to keep it as it's that thing real people do when they've crossed a sort of line, even if somewhat unbeknownst to themselves except on a subconscious level. I didn't want to make Jack into this abusive jerk, but I did want him to acknowledge, in a roundabout way, how things got out of hand. She's intent on hurting him ebcause she can, because the rage has to go somewhere - and Jack, Jack's just so focused on not losing control that he (wouldn't you know) loses control....
Rambling, rambling....
I'm so glad that you enjoyed the story - that theportrayal of their skewed perceptions, mounting grief, and general water-log came through.
Thanks so much for your lovely comments. It's made my day! :)
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I love the depth of feeling you give Jack, while maintaining the exterior we all recognise. And your Elizabeth is very interesting, ill at ease with her choices and almost seeming, to me, unbalanced. Fascinating. Can't wait for the next one!
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I love the idea of Elizabeth needing to 'find herself' as we'd say in the twenty-first century! It's very true, especially for a woman who has always had a man to define her role.
But you are going to break Jack's heart, and consequently mine, when she leaves him! That's okay, though, because I'm all for some exquisite pain, just so long as you bring them back together in the end!
This is a wonderful series, you have a great deal of talent. We J/E shippers are lucky indeed!
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That was very creepy, very emotional, and (in a way) sweet piece. You have made a good point: that the life us Sparrabeth shippers wish for them to have cannot be maintained forever.
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As a sidenote, I totally agree. I think the most fun is seeing how the OMG-TOTAL-HAPPINESS-AND-LACK-OF-CONFLICT falls apart, how these two are "rea", complex people. Issues are fun! ;)
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