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Survivor Island: Readers Vote on Third Challenge

Jul 15, 2006 00:36

write_away, it is once again up to you to decide which team should win this challenge. The survivors have created, through a series of scenes, three characters. Vote for the character who you think is the fullest and most complete by replying with the name of that character. Submit your votes by midnight (GMT) Sunday morning (8 PM EST Saturday ( Read more... )

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melsmarsh July 15 2006, 05:10:24 UTC

I love everything about Viola, it really captures what it is like to be a medical student. As a graduate student myself, I can really identify with it.

psst I'm new, can I vote? 141421 July 15 2006, 06:48:25 UTC

if I can, I'd have to say Viola as well

Re: psst I'm new, can I vote? auraesque July 15 2006, 14:27:46 UTC

Everyone can vote, save for the survivors. =)

unsay July 15 2006, 13:45:15 UTC

The Viola story tells me instead of shows me, and takes a long time to do it. It lists characteristics rather than allowing Viola to be her own story.
My vote goes to the Jason story. It has some grammar issues, but I think it is the most richly descriptive. Readers learn not only about Jason, but about his relationship with his brother.
The Thomas story does well for shock factor, but it doesn't tell much about his character.

babybird87 July 15 2006, 13:58:22 UTC

i think the thomas story is the best written, but i think the jason story is the most developed-- though it does have some issues. the viola story is really, really telling, like the above poster said. it lost me when it said she pushed back her 'long, brown hair'.

jason.

Viola. katancelt July 15 2006, 19:00:04 UTC

Some of the details in "Viola" are a little awkward and obviously placed (as someone else mentioned "long, dark hair"--ick), but I think the crafting of the story is better overall. The flow and arc are the best defined, in my opinion; it does just enough to show how she got to this place in her life, and I think it ends in just the right place (although I really want to know what happens next). "Jason" feels too cumbersome, and "Thomas" is fairly generic. I don't get a sense of what he's like as a character (since that story could be about any kid), and the ending feels cliché to me.