Magistellus

[blindwebster]

Magistellus

drawn up en pointe in his
brilliant black peltry
a penumbra for the ruff that curls
around his shining face
the sparkling water against the darkness
delights his eyes
a pair of green jewels
phosphorous and vespertine

Comments

[renka23]

I love the imagery you're trying to convey here. I like how you used 'penumbra' in relevance to the vision that is the sorcerer and his aura. (I don't think that makes enough sense; this is actually my first time posting/commenting in the community.)

Anyway, I'd love to see you continue this poem some more. Also, I have to say that the omission of punctuation and capitals, to me, did have the effect you've wanted -- focus on the words.

:)