Sparkle

[someoneingrey]

SparkleAlice looked up at the disco ball hanging two stories above her head, laughing to herself, and couldn't help but think that the only thing that should ever sparkle like a g-d damn, mother fucking disco ball was in fact a g-d damn, mother fucking disco ball and not a vampire. It, in fact, wasn't sparkling; the only lights on were the rope

Comments

[mistvieh]

AHAHAHAHAHAHA! I looooove it. So dirty and naked, unapologetic. Eyes closed, face painted, soul weary. Mmm... been there.

"...before 'are you ok?' became a loaded question and a bunch of dirty words." Beautiful. Said nearly the same thing once meself.

And who doesn't love a good jab at sparkling balls and vamps?

[jlly_coppercorn]

Very good piece this week, I like it. You can really feel the emptiness or loneliness.

Good luck this week :-)

Editor here!

[astraevirgo]

Hello! Before I read this, or begin editing, is there anything you'd like me to focus on this week?

Re: Editor here!

[someoneingrey]

er, i don't know. i wanted to have alice intereact with someone while at the club but that didn't work, so if you see an in for that, let me know.

Thanks!

Re: Editor here!

[astraevirgo]

Grey -- I don't wish to deprive you of a quality edit here, but I think that for the sake of time, I will focus on your request as well as world/scene building instead of going line by line

[freyjasgrace]

Nice job Grey, I like it. Is there more about "Alice"? I see a tag there, so I imagine there is, I'd like to know more about her. :-)

[someoneingrey]

yep, actually she'll ba back for instep. but with friends. and pron.

[freyjasgrace]

Most excellent!