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Brigit's Flame Week 4: "For in that sleep of death what dreams may come."

Jun 30, 2012 21:58

I dream of you fondly ( Read more... )

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bluegerl July 2 2012, 09:19:54 UTC

This something else! Love the repetitions, and the slight amendments...so dreamlike yet imploring one to read and understand. Wowee. absolutely wondrous.

Oh, it's so - accepting of despair and ... and the uselessness of life's dreams...

Fantastic.

Blue.

someoneingrey July 3 2012, 00:49:44 UTC

thank you!

bardiphouka July 8 2012, 15:33:00 UTC

Wonderfully written. The one quibble I might have, and this could be the traditionalist in me. I would suggest breaking off the last couplet. When I read it aloud it just seems to add a little more power. Plus then you have equal length stanzas followed by a couplet...I told you I could be a traditionalist. Okay, esp when it is someone else's poem,eh? Again, lovely job.