short story

[woolymonkey]

I've just completed and sent off my short story assignment for the creative writing course. Thought I'd post it here for my own reference and anyone else who's interested. Not sure yet if I'll be revealing the mark when I get it. (Got a 2.1 for the preliminary assignment.)

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[smtfhw]

I enjoyed reading it very much. I liked the way you managed to portray what I suspect was a common medieval mindset very much indeed. I'd very much like to know what happens next...

[woolymonkey]

Thank you! I'd like to know what happens next too. I don't really think this was a short story idea, but I had to write a short story and I didn't have time to write one thing for the assignment and another for me, so I shoved it until it sort of fit. I hope I'll write the next part some time...

[tamaranth]

ooooh, I very much like the new last line! * <- gold

[woolymonkey]

Thank you! Your beta read was a huge help.

[la_marquise_de_]

I like this a lot (though at first I will confess I was trying to work out which Bp Stephen etc -- mediaevalist brain at work). I think you hit your set targets, too, but there's a lot more to tell here: these are interesting characters and I'd like to know more.
It's quirky, too, it a very pleasing way.

[woolymonkey]

My medieval history just isn't that good! Even when I knew my stuff, it was lit not hist, so I'm good on mindsets and details but low on actual events, people and dates.
I really want to write more and get properly stuck into this story. However, assignment 3 (due Feb 26) is 40 lines of poetry. Eeek!

[la_marquise_de_]

Eek indeed. I find poetry challenging.

[geekmama]

I really enjoyed this, particularly Fulk and his interaction with Grace, thoughts about Perrott and their babies, etc. He seems very real and human, and the vein of humor along with the faint touch of sentiment that runs through it emphasises that. Love all the detail about the crozier and the illuminated book, too.