Cliche Challenge Submission

[pinepie]

Charlie hadn’t been this excited since he saw the first faint glimmer of gold underneath the wrapper of his winning Wonka bar. On his thirteenth birthday, Mr. Wonka had announced that he would take his beloved pupil on a trip to Loompaland.

‘’Because you can never become a true chocolatier without having travelled the world,’’ he had explained

Comments

[peachy_pebbles]

AAwww.. Wow, that is so sweet!! Nice and easy to read to. You also kept them both in character. I wonder what Willy is up to forgetting the second hammock like that Hmm??

I hope you are going to carry on with this. I am dying to know what happens!

Loompaland Smex = Hot

[theidolhands]

Very, very nicely done. I agree that you kept them in character very well. I enjoyed reading this a lot and got absolute images in my head while reading this. I'd leave a longer review but I gotta GOOOO!! Simply know that I very much appreciate you and everyone's contributions and I'm SO happy that piscaria proposed this idea!!

Title suggestions

[theidolhands]

Hammack-amuck luck!

Two cocoa beans in a pod!