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Unsavory submission 1 - After Dark

Jan 03, 2009 13:56

Title: After Dark
Author: giethe
Pairing(s)/Characters: gen, some Aya + Yohji
Rating: PG-13
Summary: An after-life meeting.
Warnings: None. Lack of info on how Side B ends would be most of it.
Author’s Notes: Same as above.
Disclaimer: Koyasu Takehito owns 'em. Not me.

( After Dark )

prompt: unsavory

Comments 8

white_cross_b January 5 2009, 14:50:50 UTC

I always appreciate a fic that uses drama CDs and Side B to paint a full picture. Great blend of those details all the way through.

I loved this line:

"Yohji, were we all just a series of missed encounters in the end?"

And the thought of them opening a flower shop in the afterlife? Hilarious and sweet!

mainekosama January 7 2009, 18:55:41 UTC

Hah - a flower shop :p. What else...

What a unique perspective; the death should've made this sad, but instead it seemed to me more like a start, a renovation. It was interesting to see how their lives turned out - post series stories are so rare and I really liked your version - not likes as in thought this was a beautiful life for them but liked in a way that it seemed like a destiny fulfilled. Starting with Ran dying with a sword in his hands ;-).

nikojen January 9 2009, 14:38:18 UTC

I love the quiet, reflective tone of this. And the little flashbacks are lovely glimpses of their lives.

penguin_sama January 9 2009, 20:16:30 UTC

I really loved this one. I don't really go in for stories about the character's deaths, but this was different and I really enjoyed it. The conversation was very in character, as well as entertaining, and all of the elements of the cannon were blended wonderfully well together. It had a very nice peaceful quality to it (rather than depressing) that I really enjoyed. How sad that they missed out on their feelings in life!

swirly_ayuri January 10 2009, 19:39:10 UTC

I was tearing up one minute and chuckling the next. Although I hate to ever think of the boys growing old or dying or splitting apart, it's also bittersweetly satisfying to imagine that they'll meet again in the afterlife.

There are some minor grammar problems towards the end that are a little distracting, but the overall story is brilliant, beautiful, and certainly on my list of favorites.