[PART 03] Dance for the Brokenhearted

[withkyulatte]

Title: Dance for the Brokenhearted. (PT 03)
Author: kyuppuccino
Pairing: Zhou Mi / Kyuhyun
Extra: R-rated (for cussing and hints of sex) / AU

Can we talk?

Kyuhyun stood there, with his head tilted to the side, and a look of confusion painted on his beautiful face. Can we talk? Was he being serious because, really, the situation seemed quite surreal

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[jenlovesmi]

Snippet number 3

Starting off with the last line of Snippet two, I think that was very clever. You start of with Kyuhyun's point of view of the situation, which is good. The constant repeating of can we talk makes it look like he was shocked that Zhou Mi would ask that question and Zhou Mi having his hand on his wrist didn't make matters better. He was very angry at that question. He didn't want to see him anymore after all the things that Zhou Mi did to him, I'm pretty surprised that Zhou Mi was surprised? I mean he did do horrible things to Kyuhyun. When Zhou Mi calls his name and and kyuhyun tells him no to call him that, Zhou Mi is in pain. In deep pain. He looks at him and remembers more memories of their past love. It's so bitter that it makes me feel it. It's so painfully beautiful. Now Zhou Mi wants to talk with him even more, but what he did was too much. Zhou Mi desperatly wants to talk, but it's too late now it's too late