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ylycoyote February 19 2008, 22:18:33 UTC
Hi CandyRain.....I really like the way you have used the hair image to link them in this scene.

Combining it with the idea of a veil as well, you have drawn together the "not sure whether to trust" expressed earlier, and "the feigning indifference" that the "down at Dan's" Katie has felt

mmm....the anticipation is building.... :)

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lostincandyrain February 19 2008, 22:42:06 UTC
Thanks! I wasn't sure how affectionate they should be... They have the whole "feigning indifference" thing going, and normally it's a business transaction, but, on the other hand, he could die...

I'm glad it worked alright for you anyway!

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autumnsea February 21 2008, 21:15:01 UTC
You created such a tender scene between Katie and Jack. It drew me in, Jen. The way he felt about her was easy to feel reading your words and her care of him. A very good job with this segment.

Just an edit for you: did you mean 'red' not 'read' in the second paragraph?

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lostincandyrain February 21 2008, 22:36:38 UTC
yep. Sorry about that!

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