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[Bleach] Entrapment

Mar 24, 2009 23:18

Title: Entrapment
Author: Kanon
Genre: Romance/Crime
Rating: PG-15 for now, higher rating pending
Pairing: Kurosaki Ichigo & Hitsugaya Toushiro
Disclaimer: Bleach sovereigns over me, not the other way round.
Summary: A brutal murder of a high school fresher brings a young prodigy under the PSIA’s witness protection program. However, this seemingly ( Read more... )

fandom:bleach, rating:pg15, genre:romance, genre:crime, pairing:ichihitsu, warning:au, title:entrapment, category:multichapter, warning:draft

Comments 16

hanasaki March 25 2009, 02:25:26 UTC

Wahhhh is.. OMG!!!!!!
I want to read more ToT

labymiro March 25 2009, 07:43:46 UTC

:D good to hear... i guess it's... satisfactory, then...??

hanasaki March 25 2009, 17:09:43 UTC

Yes, it's is ;)
It's interesting

roguemystic March 25 2009, 07:38:51 UTC

I demand more. Seriously. You can't just NOT not write this. I will fly over to your house and shackle you to the chair if I have to!!

labymiro March 25 2009, 07:44:57 UTC

lol... sounds like nanowrimo one all over again XP any opinion? my friend said it's written a bit differently from om and my other usual stuff... wasn't sure if he meant it being good or bad though -_-;

roguemystic March 25 2009, 08:09:35 UTC

Haha just a bit :P

My opinion? Great. It is different to what you usually write, which is good :) It's a good plotline and everything, so there's no problems there! ^^

soloyuymaxwell March 27 2009, 05:38:53 UTC

Ah! So I wasn't the only one bitten by the AU bug. XP Though I have to have cramming sessions of pure, uninterrupted concentration and you put out a draft so much more beautifully done. -pproduces naked hitsu cookies- May I bribe you into writing more? =3

labymiro March 27 2009, 08:58:49 UTC

ahahaha XP thx for taking time to rxr... *jumps at cookies* now i'm gonna have to consider the next chapter... XD *chomp chomp*

ninja_poptart March 27 2009, 18:41:09 UTC

SO AWSOME I CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE! i hope u ubtate fast cause i really wanna now what happens next!! ehehehe

labymiro March 27 2009, 18:51:22 UTC

:D glad to hear that... though, sorry to say that update won't be anytime soon... o_o; i'll do my best

moon_wing March 31 2009, 17:16:38 UTC

Oooh, this looks like it'll be good. I really liked that you already had the association of Ichi with his sisters when he talked to victims and witnes before introducing Toushiro's case, you already had us knowing exactly what Ichi was thinking. Also love Ichigo as a detective- he's usually a doctor, which while I've read good fiction on it, I can't really see myself actually happening (aside from a couple bunnies that won't shut the hell up).

And just a minor thing, when Ichi was wal\king up, you wrote 'barley' instead of 'barely.' I know I hate when I do shit like that, figured you'd want to fix it, lol.

labymiro March 31 2009, 17:33:35 UTC

that's good to hear. ichigo is not stupid academically speaking despite his image and with his dad as doc, i see why... but it was more of plot that came first and i fitted the characters in later so ichigo ended up as detective XD

lol i'm sure there's a lot more typos than what you mentioned 'cuz this is complete draft. i just wanted to see the reaction from ppl after reading. but thx for letting me know.