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vail-kagami: Hands of the Clock, Part 2/2 (Jack/Ten) [NC-17]

Apr 17, 2008 04:37

Title: Hands of the Clock (2/2)
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pair: jack/10th doctor, challenge: power, fanfic, author: vail_kagami

Comments 21

amythest_n_ice April 17 2008, 03:00:17 UTC

*jaw on the floor*

That was quite scary, and DARK, but God, I loved it.

wendymr April 17 2008, 03:02:02 UTC

I thought the moral dilemmas you presented in the first half of this and in the second were interesting, though I wasn't convinced that Jack would ignore all his training and knowledge and try to change history. He would know the consequences are always worse than what he's trying to avoid.

But with the rape you lost me completely, I'm afraid. I'm not a fan of non-con and violence anyway, but I can see the logic for it in fics about the Master, for example. Quite apart from any disquiet about portraying rape as entertainment, the thought of Jack raping the Doctor... no. Not even when he's very angry and hurt; I just don't believe he's capable of it and I couldn't read past that. Sorry. It's a pity, because I did think you had an interesting premise.

ivy_b April 17 2008, 15:22:35 UTC

Damn.

I didn't know it would be this dark, I wasn't expecting it so... Damn. Really socker-punched me. Not that it wasn't good, it was just so depressing.

A few sp mistakes:

"paranoid worry that once day the Doctor would get himself killed"- one day

"He had to safe the world and the Doctor wanted to stop him!"- save the world

"before Jack could reach the bottom and he screamed out his despair as the air around them began to burn"- botton?

vail_kagami April 19 2008, 00:09:41 UTC

Thanks for pointing out the typos! Corrected them.
And thanks for the feedback, naturally.

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vail_kagami April 22 2008, 17:54:41 UTC

Thank you very much!
I believe that no human can stay the same man after having lived for so long while everyone dies.

huggabledog April 26 2008, 02:32:52 UTC

Phew. Had to sit back and wait until it had sunk in. Really well written, a deep insight into the darkness in Jack and the inhumanity of the Doctor. Inhumanity? Bad choice of words. The Doctor's better than humans, who are capable of terrible cruelties. He's alien, but has far more heart than any human, considering what he's been through. Sorry, getting sidetracked ( ... )

vail_kagami April 26 2008, 11:03:57 UTC

Mind the long comment?! Who would mind such a comment? It completely blew my mind!
I can see why fans of Jack wouldn't like this. But such a thing is always easiter to write than to read.

I think it gets forgotten too often, even is the show, that the Doctor is an alien and I like to fucus on that little difference ( ... )

huggabledog April 26 2008, 11:24:46 UTC

And... just thanks for the comment! It made my day!
You're very, very welcome. I've been trying to dream combining Planet of the Ood with Rickston Slade for the past two nights (since I saw Planet of the Ood). You loved the handcuff scene (me too), but I keep reliving the crane chasing the Doctor to exhaustion through the factory. It was so cruel. Then Rickston coming. So you're making my nights very agreeable.

"Still not what yo had in mind, I imagine, but it might count as a step in the right direction"
Hey, well written captive Doctor will have me spellbound regardless. I'll look forward to it.

blackletter April 28 2008, 01:38:02 UTC

I have a story planned in which Jack and the Doctor are ambushed and imprisoned in a room that's located outside of time. Outside the room time doesn't move at all and the Doctor is completely cut off from it. All he has now to hold one to is his own timeline and Jack's 'wrong'one and it's quickly driving him mad. It would be psycological torture but no physical one.

I sooo want to read this!