Cinders (pg)

[wiggerwoman]

Title: Cinders
Pairing: Lipton/Speirs
Rating: PG (just for smoking)
A/N: I was originally gonna keep it down to 100 words, but unfortunately (or fortunately, depending on how you look at it) this turned out to be about 360. Oh well.
I would also really like constructive criticism- Reviewers get muffins (the invisible kind). Or cookies (also the

Comments

[profcricket]

Mmmmmmmmmmmmm! Very cute, very sweet. I like the in-between moments, their mutual awkwardness, but how how it nonetheless hints at something more to come.

Well done! :)

[wiggerwoman]

Thanks so much! I'm kind of thinking about adding on to this, the only problem is that I probably won't get it done for a few weeks.

[profcricket]

You can always do a "part two" later! :)

[happysquid08]

this was cute. a little snapshot.

Your Lipton is so incredibly cute with his snarky yet distinctly unwitty comments. The lines you gave him were believable. I had to giggle/chuckle when his cigarette snagged one of his fingers. Clearly this man doesn't smoke very often... :D

And oooooooh when Speirs grabbed his hand I was all, "Aw shoo I see you boiiiii!!!" Unashamedly, of course. His daydreaming piece? Could be a springboard for another fic, methinks. Would you mind terribly if I tried my hand at it?

Tiny little thing: I think that spacing out your text would help the flow for reading. the crunched spacing throws me off a bit. That's probably just my personal preference talking.

Thanks for spreading the Lipton/Speirs love! XD

[wiggerwoman]

Thanks so much!
And I wouldn't mind at all as long as I get to read it :)
btw, mind if I add you?

[happysquid08]

go right on ahead, soldier! :D

[wiggerwoman]

Yay! Thank you :)

[doompie]

Sweet :D

[wiggerwoman]

Thank you!