Comments | wierdauntie: Instep- week 1 of Brigit's Flame, word count 604

wierdauntie

Instep- week 1 of Brigit's Flame, word count 604

Oct 02, 2009 20:49

She sat on the rocky edge of the cliff, watching his arms slice through the cool water far below. Sand glimmered deep beneath the aqua surface where the perfect wedge of his torso met the froth churned up by his kicking legs. She imagined herself diving in an elegant line into the water 20 feet down-coming up beside him, a siren’s ( Read more... )

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rephen October 3 2009, 07:08:04 UTC

Wonderful! Sweet and tight and beautifully-written porn. I enjoyed it immensely :)

wierdauntie October 3 2009, 07:38:18 UTC

Hee hee! This is fun! I could find a new calling!

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wierdauntie October 3 2009, 17:37:34 UTC

thank you and welcome to the Flame!

vyvyan_wilde October 3 2009, 14:51:54 UTC

That was really sexy.. it struck me as kind of smooth, like water :3 I really liked the way you described the sea and beach setting as well.

wierdauntie October 3 2009, 17:38:25 UTC

Wouldn't mind if this were autobiographical as well *wink* but alas...

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wierdauntie October 10 2009, 07:10:40 UTC

Thank you for commenting and reading!

drippedonpaper October 14 2009, 00:10:05 UTC

I like geniferrose's description of life:) I always fuck it up myself. But my intentions were good...

I've had these kind of little fantasies myself but I did read once, um, the logistics of it can be difficult, IRL, due to water washing away things that would be helpful to keep.

But then again, it IS fantasy and in fantasy, it works perfectly, right?:)

I like how, like the French (I think it is) you related their description of orgasms to how she almost drowned. It really tied the piece together.

You did a great job. My piece for next week um, doesn't have the activity yours does but the character IS nude.

I don't know why I sometimes feel awkward writing like that, writers write about EVERYTHING and we spend a certain percentage of our lives nude. It would make sense if at least that percentage of our writing included nudity, right?:)

Great job, as always. I always enjoy reading you:)

katden October 8 2009, 23:12:19 UTC

Alrighty then!!
*grinning like a goof*
The pron pact be on, m'dear! (October is going to be my most favorite month EVER!)

wierdauntie October 10 2009, 07:11:14 UTC

heh heh.

(this one is NOT autobiographical, alas)