Even in Pain

[the_dark_doctor]

Finally, i got a dark story written up. It's on WhoFic.

Title: Even in Pain
Author: the-dark-doctor
Rating: NC-17
Genre: Graphic Sex, angst, Character Study, Drama, Slash, Hurt/Comfort
Characters: Harry, The Doctor (4th), Sarah Jane
Dislcaimer: I don't own Doctor Who or anything to do with it, it belonsg to the BBC
Summery: For the passed few days, Harry

Comments

[van]

Wow, this is really dark indeed. Is the drug out of Harry's system now, or will it come back? I hope it's gone. Ugh! How awful. and poor Sarah Jane, she has no clue, and would probably be so horrified if she ever found out! And yet poor Harry has to keep it all in side. Aaah, what a difficult thing. I did like the mention of Jamie and Zoe though, back on Gallifrey. Nice touch.

You have some grammar and tense errors in this. You might try to pay closer to that when you reread through it before posting, or look into getting a beta reader. It makes reading the story pretty hard, or confusing.

[the_dark_doctor]

Ah, thanks for pointing that out, Van. I'll get my sister as my beta-reader Thanks for reviewing.

At first i thought about not mentioning what happened to Jamie and Zoe, but then again, it suited the atmos.

Chapter three will be updated soon ;)

[van]

Yeah, I like the Doctor remembering the sadness. And the bit about him being half-human was really shocking. I know it's true from the "Eighth Doctor movie" but so many people don't believe it. So him having pain from being half human, I thought was very interesting and original.

Anyway, good luck with chapter three! :D I am writing a story with a sort of dark second Doctor. So maybe I will post it to your community when I finish it.

[the_dark_doctor]

Ah brilliant! looking forward into reading that. :D