[fic] Arcanum Paterfamilias -- Chapter Eight: Mektah Rahu

[whips_n_dozers]

Arcanum Paterfamilias -- Chapter Eight: Mektah Rahu
Authors: mfelizandy & fractured_chaos
Genre: Drama/Political Thriller. Futurefic, Genfic, Plotfic, Light Romance. No Sex.
Rating: Teen, for violence and Ed's potty mouth.
Chapter Word Count: 11,000
Main Canon Characters/Pairings: Scar/OC. With nods to: Roy/Riza, Ed/Winry and Al/Mei. Hints of: Jean/Rebecca and Ling/Ran

Comments

[floranna]

Heeh! I have been waiting for this!

I just adore the world in this, and the quip on Roy's kids is just so Ed. I guess we won't be seeing them, though?

Arthritis, nice for you to show so practicallly how he is getting old. ^^

Now if the Estvarya would be continued...

[whips_n_dozers]

Thanks! :D

No, we most likely won't see Roy's (or Jean's) kids. We already had so many OCs we had to cut the cast somewhere XD We may, or may not even show Al and Mei's girls.

Yeah, we wanted to point out that it was several years in the future (15, to be exact), but just saying so really doesn't bring it home quite as well as showing the oldest character in the story showing his age a little. Don't worry, Scar-luv is still able to kick-ass with the best of them (except, of course, his teacher, who still has a few tricks up his sleeves).

As for Estvarya... She's working on it, I promise! XD

[dreamer1789]

What everyone else said. XD
The detail keeps being wonderful (you gotta also appreciate the artist cameo - it's actually believable too) and as the plot thickens each chapter is well worth the breaks.
The rising hostility and mistrust will no doubt make the next chapter even more engaging. Someone warn Riza & hide Roy. ;)

[whips_n_dozers]

Thank you! :D

I'm glad you found the cameo believable. We knew that Roy was going to build a solid intel network in Xerxes if he was going to spend any time there, and a bar would be a good place to start -- adding a sister to the bar owner, and making her an artist was easy. What better way to carry intel, than with symbols hidden in the drawing, instead of words? It wasn't a stretch after that to decide she would dig in with her pencil so he could feel the symbols.

Oh yes... there will be more tension in the next chapter -- along with a little bit of weirdness. ;)

[lunaria_kitty]

I am so immersed in this story! <3 As with Estvarya, it's superbly told and so well thought out. It's had me hooked all the way through!

I love Scar's name--though I wonder if I've pronunciation right. (It sounds pretty any way I say it though. ^^) The subtle changes to the past fit smoothly as if it actually happened that way, and the whole work is so believable that I keep forgetting that it's diverged from the manga.

I can't wait to see more of this. I admire all the thought and planning that you've both put into the culture and spirit and feel of the Ishvarun people. That kind of dedication makes me want to read anything written in this AU.

Very well done. I'll be excitedly awaiting your next update! :)

How Could Hell Be Any Worse?

[ext_674799]

The last few chapters have been breathtaking with action scene after action scene. At times, it's hard for my imagination to settle down and follow the nuances of quiet (Al's ulterior motive of coming to the consulate, for example) times.
The thought of more hell breaking loose is almost too much; how can you possibly top what's already been unleashed?
When this story is at last finished, I hope you will have it printed, and bound with dzioo's art. That way, I can pull it off my bookshelf and enjoy favorite chapters all over again.

Hello?

[capnhoozits]

I've been checking faithfully for updates nearly every day since December. I know how life can encroach, and I hope it's nothing serious, but I do so hope you are still going to continue with this highly superior work.

Re: Hello?

[mfelizandy]

Oh, we haven't abandoned this! We've done a lot of adjusting of events in Chapter 9, including pulling out two or three scenes that were drafted very early on, got moved around, and finally ended up at the head of 9...and we realized that not only did they not fit into 9, they don't fit anywhere in the story. So we stripped those out, and now we're writing anew...and in my case trying to keep track of what's changed and what is going to be pushed later in the story, and whether I can shoehorn Asher into another scene or two, because I'm very fond of Asher and Makhu.

Anyway, thank you for such devoted patience!

Re: Hello?

[capnhoozits]

Hooray! Oh, yes, you must squeeze Asher & Makhu in there!