A fic. Yes, it's all true.

[whichwitch666]

Hello all,

I have a big update due, lots of info and stuff about my life as of late. But that'll have to wait for when I'm less lazy (shut up).

Meanwhile, take this story, read it, write me feedback if you'd be so kind. Oh, and if you feel like playing beta for me, there's a cookie in it for ya. But not really.

The Left SleeveFirefly, post-

Comments

[auburnnotlisa]

Oh, that was painful, and so genuine...

(Also, icon love.)

- Mona

[whichwitch666]

You know, it was painful to write, too...
Thanks for the feedback, mona.

(hey, what's with the new lj?)

[whichwitch666]

Oh, no, I'm sadly way behind on my lj reading :(
I'll catch up eventually and see what it's all about.

[reve_lucide]

Oh, this gave me the *shivers*.

[whichwitch666]

Ohhh... thank you. That's always a good to get from readers, especially for a mourning-type story.

[anxiety_junkie]

snerfle *wipes tear*

poor broken!Zoe.

and this was great, I think you captured her really well, I can totally see her closing off altogether once things calm down.

[whichwitch666]

I agree that Zoe would close off and retreat to herself, and this is why this is a very private fic. There are a lot of ways to mourn, and I think Zoe will do it privately, and intensely, in the middle of the night...

Thank you for the feedback :)

[thegranddewru]

Awww *sniff* I hate these things, and yet I never get tired of reading them. You did a great job. The tone the subject, great job.

I'm not sure it there should be more paragraphs where there's all the speaking, or if it should stay that way because it's a dream and they are very hectic like that sometimes. Hee, I'm always ready to throw all the rules out the window for the emotional impact I want! :)

And see, this is me trying to leave more detailed feedback... instead I just sound like I'm rambling!

[whichwitch666]

Thank you for the lovely feedback. Coming from you, who wrote one of my top 3 most favorite Wash/Zoe fics of all time (is that a sentence?), that means a lot :)

I know what you mean about hating these gut-wrenching stories. I much rather read the courtship ones, where everything ends up all nice and fluffy. But sometimes they sneak up on you in the middle of the night...

As to the way I break my paragraphs (or don't) - I deliberated whether it's gonna throw the readers or not. Eventually I broke *some* of the paragraphs (can you believe it used to be worse?), but left it as is where I really needed the intensity and confusion. It's all about the unbearable pain of loss, that's intense, and this is how I do intense :) Anyway I hope it does work.

Thanks again for writing, and for trying to give detailed feedback. I appreciate it :)

And hey, did you ever end up writing that "I'd do anything" sequel?... ~crosses fingers~

[browncoat3193]

Fan-fucking-tastic.....this is amazing...i love it so much...keep up the good work!

[whichwitch666]

Wow, thank you, what a great response!

You know, when I wrote this fic I wanted readers to sort of "feel it in the gut", and I think I succeeded with you. Right? :)