Comments | whereismytalent: 7: fan fic { numb3rs } : "their only crime was curiosity" [don/amita]

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7: fan fic { numb3rs } : "their only crime was curiosity" [don/amita]

Sep 26, 2007 17:17

title. their only crime was curiosity
author. nv
fandom. numb3rs
characters. don eppes/amita ramanujan
rating. nc-17
genre. het
word count. 1236
challenge/prompt.: quotes by women writers for numb3rswom3n
warnings. het, infidelity
disclaimer. the characters and canon contained herein are the property of cheryl heuton and nicolas falacci, as well as any ( Read more... )

rating: nc-17, character: don eppes, challenge: numb3rswom3n, pairing: don/amita, character: amita ramanujan, fandom: numb3rs, fan fic

Comments 14

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neur0vanity September 27 2007, 22:15:36 UTC

Thank you! The prompt screamed Don to me.

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neur0vanity September 28 2007, 08:55:35 UTC

Occasionally, the source code for the Smooth Sailing theme gets wonky. LJ's pretty good about fixing it quickly.

sororcula September 27 2007, 01:33:21 UTC

Awesome use of the prompt, and I particularly love the structure, the rhythm, of this. Very nice.

I love the bit about her hair, with her so worried over it and him not even seeming to notice.

Two tiny things: who slept with someone just because he was physcially attractive. And Cautiously, he looks at her should say looked.

neur0vanity September 27 2007, 22:17:24 UTC

Thanks for the corrections! Totally my bad. As far as the second one, I kept having to correct myself on switching into present tense as I wrote this. I've been reading so much work (Palahniuk) that's in present tense and writing a lot in that tense as well, so it was bleeding over into this one.

sororcula September 28 2007, 01:42:22 UTC

Oh, dude, I accidentally switch tenses all the time.

gyen_gaoltosing September 27 2007, 03:17:53 UTC

He was the dark and the danger. He was the dark and the handsome.

Mmm. Sexy stuff, there at the beginning! It's interesting how icky-creepy Don is at the end. That was a great turn-around.

neur0vanity September 27 2007, 22:19:42 UTC

Does Don come off as icky-creepy? That wasn't my intention. But, then again, I've been hearing a lot recently that I've made him creepy. Maybe I need to go back and watch a few episodes to redevelop my characterization of him.

I'm happy you enjoyed it! Thanks so much for commenting; it's hugely appreciated.

sororcula September 28 2007, 01:43:08 UTC

I didn't find him creepy, FWIW.

asemic September 27 2007, 03:54:41 UTC

Shit! I read what said about the mistakes and I'm so sorry that I didn't catch them. Very sorry.

This was damn wonderful to read when you sent it to me and in this form. I like this, I really do.

neur0vanity September 27 2007, 22:21:25 UTC

No worries! My concern was that it read well, and you totally helped me on that. Many thanks!

I'm so glad to hear that you enjoyed it. As always, your opinion means so much to me.

emmademarais September 27 2007, 09:14:49 UTC

You scored *Ley* as a beta your first time out? I hope you appreciate that that's like winning the fucking lottery.

It worked though. This fic is better than anything you've written in ages. Keep using betas and you'll get even better. Works for me and thousands of other authors...

neur0vanity September 27 2007, 22:24:46 UTC

I know! I feel so blessed. Ley's got the greatest mind.

Things magically came together on this one, and I hope that continues to be the case in the future so that Ley or any other betas don't have their heads explode from how awful my fic can be.

Thanks so much for your comment. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. You're one of the few people out there whose feedback means the whole world to me.