I think Givera's saying Master Billaba's first name is a bit out of place, due to the whole 'respect' thing ingrained in padawans since the beginning.
That's my only crit. XD?
I love this AU you're painting so far. I especially admire how Givera, for all the conflict she's going through, manages to shove it aside for wounded Master Windu. Palpatine's suitably evil and conniving appearance also adds an element of urgency here. Your writing style builds tension and emotion well.
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I think Givera's saying Master Billaba's first name is a bit out of place, due to the whole 'respect' thing ingrained in padawans since the beginning.
That's my only crit. XD?
I love this AU you're painting so far. I especially admire how Givera, for all the conflict she's going through, manages to shove it aside for wounded Master Windu. Palpatine's suitably evil and conniving appearance also adds an element of urgency here.
Your writing style builds tension and emotion well.
Please continue, yes? 8D
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I'm hooked on this and hope you continue it soon (especially since I'm finally catching up). :p
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