Original slash beginning- All the Wide Ocean to Cross

[wendynever]

Another original slash beginning- this one kind of promising to me. May-December (okay more like May-October since Tom is only 40-ish). Pg so far.

Comments

[charisstoma]

Oh this was nice and sad and good.

"Danny took one more longing look at the sea, then one down at the waves lapping just in front of him. He dipped a toe in. It was colder than he expected, but after all that, it was just water- wet and salty and cold and big, but just water."
Puts it in a larger perspective, nice closing.

[wendynever]

Thank you.

I'm really pleased with the metaphore of the big old ocean being scary to Danny representing the big old grown up world being scary to him, not to mention him taking the risk of coming out being scary as well. I'm glad it worked for you.

[photoash]

Wow, I think this is my favorite of the three. I like how this could stand alone how it is right now, or expand into a much longer story! I really hope you decide to continue it. I think that your characterization of Danny and his totally realistic thoughts (the tail light, his honesty not to lie but being practical about it)... fabulous!

[wendynever]

Thank you. I really like Danny so far, too. I hope I can keep it that way.